A Commenwealth Of Comm-oddities

A Commenwealth Of Comm-oddities

A Poem by Robert Trakofler
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I don't know... you tell me:) Oh yeah spoken word at bottom

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__A Commonwealth Of Comm-oddities__

 


I recall duck and cover drills

And fallout shelter signs

Bomb strike tick tocks of cold war chills

In civil defense time

Now our youth hears the click tick thrill

And drills for shooting crimes

And the clock cries to the blood spilled

Our modern nursery rhyme

Ballot ticks for judicious kill

Twitches tic our youth pines

To pay your freedoms bill

Children play secluded confines

As silent alarms trills

The pandemic pendulum grind

And yet we remain still

As disparity undermines

The health of the impoverished ill

To fill your bottom lines

Your commonwealth of selfish ilk

Can’t stand the test of time

For liberty our blood was spilt

For all of human kind

Not for a precious few to filch

And leave the rest denied

Tick tock tick the clock strikes freewill

And split these wretched binds

And our children’s hearts will not cry

 


© 2020 Robert Trakofler


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Good rhyming here, Bunny. Yes, I recall those cold war drills; get under your desk to protect yourself from the nuclear blast, etc. Now the kids drill for an active shooter, or don't go to school at all because of the pandemic. And within a month, hurricane season will be upon us. Cheers.

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Robert Trakofler

3 Months Ago

right now I am so thinking of the children of the psychological damage much of this has to them:( I .. read more



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Sadly, I suspect that when the doors re-open, it will be back to the way it was very quickly.

Regarding the effect of this pandemic/lockdown on children, I tend to see it in the same way as Stella Armour does, when she comments that children are resilient. I am also minded that youth has an innate ability to live for the morrow, so I am confident they will quickly leave the trials and tribulations of this pandemic behind.

I would also add, that despite the incredibly sad loss of life and the pain of the economic fallout, the upside for many families is that they are spending so much more time together; and I can vouch from talking to many of my friends, that to varying degrees, they have found this to be a positive thing.

Personally, I am more concerned that as a species, we are becoming increasingly desensitized to the natural order of things, and I worry about the longer term, bigger picture of how the world will shape up for future generations. Because whichever way you stack it, (and current pandemic aside,) it's not looking that rosy at the moment.

Beccy.

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Robert Trakofler

2 Months Ago

I very much hope so for the children Beccy. We have so much we have to do so many choices the need f.. read more
Stark, brilliant words holding up a mirror on the tragic failings of our times.

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Robert Trakofler

2 Months Ago

Thanks Mom:)
MomzillaNC

2 Months Ago

You're welcome
In this one it is the subject matter rather than the music and flow that get to me. And get to me it does, strongly. I remember the coldness of the Cold War. I remember the various frights and emergencies.
Hide under a table to protect yourself from the nuclear winter. Yeah right. Ah simpler times
I remember Ban the Bomb marches. In fact this whole write takes me back to the sixties and the comparisons with today are stark and timely. Although it has got to be said apparently if you remember the sixties you wern't there. So I will restrict myself to saying thats what I have been told. I was actually in school at the time.
However today feels like something dreamt up by Hollywood not the cold dark black and white, (in more ways than one) days of the sixties. My greatest worries then were what Jed Clampett woyld do with his money and whether Mr Ed could really talk to Wilbur. Truth be told.
Whereas today I really despair about the tribalism and caligula antics of our so called leaders.
This is then, cutting eventually to the chase, a political beauty par excellence. The realities of memory and specific contemporay problems turned into art. And isn't that one othe functions of true art.


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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler

2 Months Ago

I have been crawling out of my skin lately in my form... this one started out after someone sent me .. read more
Ken Simm.

2 Months Ago

So you don't know who Jed Clampett and Mr Ed are? Missed out there Mr Bunny.
Robert Trakofler

2 Months Ago

Lol I probably have most of the hillbillies episodes memorized
War itself is a negative term be it against the people, society or virus. Even if we earn victory, it would cost a lot of lives by then. We are in such a depressed situation where we cannot do anything but hope for the lesser damage and better days. The big font itself speaks loud, and the rhythm adds a great flow to the write. Felt sad seeing the image it portrays, but love the piece.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Robert Trakofler

2 Months Ago

Hi Moog:) I love your name it sounds like a drum beat! I just can’t keep thinking about the affect.. read more
moog-drika

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much haha. This is a combination of my full name actually. It's Mugdha Chandrika!
.. read more
Robert Trakofler

2 Months Ago

Your full name makes an even better drumbeat:)
dear Bunny... our people have grown in numbers
Unencumbered by storms and babies borne... How can we survive when voting is our only solution to a life of freedom when breathing is
behind a Mask of mystery. Truly, Pat

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Robert Trakofler

2 Months Ago

it sure does feel that way Patricia:( and I do agree about overpopulation being part of the problem .. read more
Patricia Wedel

2 Months Ago

I truly hope so, if only we had a reasonable solution where the best could save our values that we h.. read more
hey, BB, I liked the dual images of war and the virus running side by side in this, it does seem like a war against some unseen deadly foe, once again your clever used of language is a delight to read

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler

3 Months Ago

thanks my friend I cant help but think of the children lately I have a photo of my two grandchildren.. read more
gram linski

3 Months Ago

that is a beautiful but very sad image indeed, B, hopefully soon we can all rejoice and have a mass .. read more
yes, i wonder also, even without this pandemic, what kind of a future we leave our grandchildren
i noticed that some international funding/investment is being withdrawn from alberta's oil-sands project, which is a minor improvement, but many more changes must also take place

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler

3 Months Ago

Hi Dave:) lets hope this experience lights a fire under the masses:)
Children are pretty resilient you know, they soon bounce back . I think any mental health issues are more likely to come from the elderly who are all too well aware that self isolation lets the mind go into overdrive.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler

3 Months Ago

good morning Stella:) if ever a there was a time in my life when the importance for making changes w.. read more
Oh, well..We are in a state of deterioration. I couldn’t imagine what our society would be ten or twenty years from now.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler

3 Months Ago

it is my deepest hope that thru all of this when it comes time to reopen our doors we all make some .. read more
Woah a sublime poem and I enjoyed the rhyming word choices coincidentally similar to my latest poem. Your poem touches on the past, present and future in deep poetry. Kudos.


Plz Pleez do read and comment my newest poem too, right on top.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tania Mo

3 Months Ago

Where did I delete ? All is there
S.zaynab.kamoonpury

3 Months Ago

Oh ok is saw them, they were hidden, anyway you are trolling me just stop it, you must be like the I.. read more
Tania Mo

3 Months Ago

Just saying what I see. No probs

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I am the Bunny but the bunny isn't me long live the bunny Hello I’m Robert I own an art gallery and performance space in Pittsburgh called The Zenith It is also an antique store and a veget.. more..

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