Transcendent Torpor

Transcendent Torpor

A Poem by Robert Trakofler
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final draft (hopefully) Spoken word link in the notes section below. As always thank you for reading/listening to my stuff:)

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 Transcendent Torpor

 

The dazed gloss of torpor

That haze my thoughts from order

This Malaise daubs my discourse

In surmise

 

My gaze caught the border

Of the sun rays washing implore

To grace upon the corners

Of my eyes

 

I must rise…

 

Feel the warm touch

Of dawns light, lick my cheek

To remind me

That it’s a vision,

Worthy of adore

 

My comprise

Is not just the faulty whispers

Of transgression

Or of sorrows touch

To shadow my sight

In the shades of slight

 

I must rise

 

To cradle the view

Of a spider web on my windowsill

The majesty of its weave;

The purity of its purpose;

The nourishment of bleeds

 

I must rise



This picture was a gift from an artist friend of whom recently passed away:) 




© 2020 Robert Trakofler


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Not sure if the state of mind alluded to here is depression, the blues or just out of sorts. Torpor can describe many things. Suffice it to say, though, that the work illustrates nicely how full appreciation of a simple scene of nature can rapidly alleviate negative mental states. The sight of a delicate spider's web in the first rays of morning can sometimes do more than a jolt of Paxil. Not bad at all for a first draft.

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Robert Trakofler

3 Weeks Ago

yes i think of this as an exercise that plays out for me every day (very often in the morning). I ha.. read more



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Oh yes, the first rays of sun kissing your cheek make you feel alive and wipe away any lethargy that wants to linger. Nature has a way of reminding us we are not alone. We are part of something....and all of it counts. That artwork is very special. The colors make me think of ideas that are swimming through the mind. You obviously have plenty of them. Good one, Robert. Lydi**

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


You have caught me in your morning web yet again. I see myself rising in torpor and having to make a concious choice with my moods. Which are many but not that varied. Looking at what is around me always does develop, (that is the right word) me for the day. Like an old negative photograph appearing in a tray in the darkroom. And to fully wring the allusion dry the mood is not fixed until it is fixed.
So, this poem does indeed hit many notes for me but overall it smashes one true one. If I dare say it we are much alike brother.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Robert Trakofler

3 Weeks Ago

I just wrote the exact same thing to you! I just got goosebumps
Ken Simm.

3 Weeks Ago

So did I. Spooky eh?
Inactivity is okay as long as ut doesn't take over totally. One needs to tune out sometimes but without missing out on anything worthwhile. I enjoyed your word choice here sir!

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Robert Trakofler

3 Weeks Ago

my brain is very much like one of those old motors that require a a good many hand cranks to get it .. read more
AJNJ

3 Weeks Ago

Hahahaha. I relate. Totally ... :)
As an anti-torpor remedy, there is little to compare with sunlight kissing a morning's windowsill and wending into the room
Do spiders converse with bunnies

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Robert Trakofler

3 Weeks Ago

yes they do but they are difficult to understand because they are always drooling so the words come .. read more
Dave Brown

3 Weeks Ago

and rightly so.
To break the torpor needs sheer force of will sometimes. But break it one must. To fully avail of the majestic bounty of life outside. A lovely motivational poem on the tusssel between our internal world and the external world to get a bigger share of us! Fantastico Dear Bunny! Says I.
~ Your friend Ditzy

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Robert Trakofler

3 Weeks Ago

one of the things i have learned from you kitty cats is the importance of multiple naps:)
Dhara_Ditzy Kat

3 Weeks Ago

Power naps I call them! They keep us sharp! You know me well, bunny friend 💕
In listening to this, I definitely feel the torpor . . . pretty lacking in verbal energy (a good thing) . . . and even when you speak the lines "I must rise" . . . it's not very convincing. This is different than I would've expected, but I like it. It captures how it feels to know we need to get up & get busy like the spider in the corner, but the spider has such thin nimble legs, whereas mine feel like elephantitis legs. So much is sparked by your poem, I'm afraid I might have to go back to bed . . . it's 5 am & still dark . . . maybe I should puff one & return to torpor. Maybe that will be my reply poem: the return to torpor . . . we all crave it! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

I'm getting waves of smoke over the mountain from that last fire that's still raging in Big Sur. Not.. read more
Robert Trakofler

3 Weeks Ago

LOL i just woke up from taking a nap damn torpor
barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

I will need a nap later . . . got up too early 4 am!
Whatever the state our minds may find themselves in, I am a firm believer that nature can calm. The sunlight kissing your cheek and the spiders web on the window cill, a gentle way to start to ease you into the day. Your posted artwork Bunny given to you by your late friend, resembles a frazzled mind to me. All good wishes from across the pond.

Chris

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Robert Trakofler

3 Weeks Ago

this is one of those pieces i hope Kindle Ken finds He once told me when he starts an art class he a.. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Dear Bunny, I have always found bunnies to be such lovely creatures :))
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The picture certainly makes me think of torpor and the foggy haze in the mind that occurs when we wake in the morning. Whether we are dazed from sleep or the troubles of our existence, we must always rise to greet the sun and embrace the new day. Who knows.....with a little kiss from the sun's rays the cobwebs are blown away and clarity resumes. Love the title, Master Bunny! You always use some great word choices. A fine piece, my friend. Vibrant art there, too!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Robert Trakofler

3 Weeks Ago

I am on my first cup of anti-torpor LOL! that painting sits right next to my desk Gary was part pain.. read more
To me... the Art represents the colors of Impurities
which we survive, or otherwise pass over the great divide.
For me.. I have been given many years to learn the intricacy
of embedded unconditional love... and perhaps like a
Mourning Dove... I will fly away and join the others. gently, Pat

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Robert Trakofler

3 Weeks Ago

not far from me is the national aviary... the original old victorian building is made entirely of gl.. read more
Patricia Wedel

2 Weeks Ago

Birds at my Kitchen window trust me as they sit on the railing of the Deck with lots of Sunflower se.. read more
top quality work, I really dig and appreciate this

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler

3 Weeks Ago

thank you good sir:)

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I am the Bunny but the bunny isn't me long live the bunny Hello I’m Robert I own an art gallery and performance space in Pittsburgh called The Zenith It is also an antique store and a veget.. more..

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