National Treasure

National Treasure

A Poem by Robert Trakofler
"

This is an old song I wrote about a muse melded with another song about a muse maybe I should of called it amused:) song link in notes section. As always thanks for listening/reading me:)

"

She’s a national treasure

Composed for our pleasure

Reflections in motion so fine

This host of her image

Takes hold in my vision

Her brush strokes my heart in each line

Impossible feelings

Take form in new meanings

These colors that dance in my mind

 

And I wrap myself in a bittersweet coat of intangibles

In the midst of the mist of the slightness of her vision

But I am the lucky one

Oh I am the lucky one

I am the lucky one

 

She’s a national treasure

Brings form her displeasure

Striking seductively fine

The ghosts in her image

Call out in my measure

Her brush strokes so hard in my mind

A national treasure

Take both pain and pleasure

Delightful exquisite and fine

This muse steals my heart with each line

 

I’ll wrap myself in her bittersweet coat of intangibles

In the midst of her mist for the brightness of her vision

Oh I am the lucky one

And I will always run

To hold her visions spun

Oh I am the lucky one

© 2020 Robert Trakofler


Author's Note

Robert Trakofler

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review


... Hey B B you just done good again ... superb wording .. I just love your various variables on the brush stroke theme ... and hey .. any one told ya before that you do a mean Robert Plant ... YOU R a National Treasure sir so U R ....

... Neville :)


Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler

3 Weeks Ago

I don't think i could come up with a nicer thing to say:) and i'm pretty good at nice! thank you Nev
Neville

3 Weeks Ago


.. always a pleasure :)


Advertise Here
Want to advertise here? Get started for as little as $5

Reviews

Nice one Robert. It's more difficult to find the words that fit the same melody line without variation, but you did it, and it helped me to get into the rhythm of the piece very quickly. I didn't understand some of the phrases, but they were interesting and made me re-read to see if context helped decipher the meaning. You have 3 strong hooks for titles: "National Treasure" and " I am the lucky one" and my favorite : "A bittersweet coat of intangibles" : a tough choice, I imagine. Well done.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

John Cardwell

1 Week Ago

And you as well Robert! No refining necessary in my mind. And I’m not fully committed to the word.. read more
Robert Trakofler

1 Week Ago

you get me and my writing style to a T!!!!! wow it is nice to be read by you what a treat that just .. read more
John Cardwell

1 Week Ago

Glad to hear it!
This poem brought to mind many beautiful actresses and singers, a country would be proud of. You take me to great places with your words here, dear sir.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

thank you Peston:) they are gorgeous those muses steal our breaths
AJNJ

2 Weeks Ago

Don't they always....They're all we have these days 🤗
Loved this poem. You paint her with lovely brushstrokes here. She makes you a National Treasure too.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you Dhara:) now i'm blushing again (damn this irish complexion) can't hide anything! you migh.. read more
Dhara_Ditzy Kat

2 Weeks Ago

I am right dear Bunny! You're welcome :)
[send message][befriend] Subscribe
⚘
It indeed does read like a mixture of the poetic and lyrical muses; especially in terms of the repetition that reads like a chorus of sorts. Those muses sure are intoxicating and always leave us breathless with what they can create. You are very lucky if you have two muses, one for art and one for poetry. Many unfortunates have no muses at all. So they are your national treasures. Much like Dolly Partons bountiful gifts! Lol. Much enjoyed this one, Master Bunny!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

the trouble with muses is you can adore, beseech, plead, hold, fall to your knees, beg and ALMOST ca.. read more
I listened to sound cloud. It is quite different writing lyrics instead of poetry. For me, you have to have the music in your head as you write. Others do it differently. I have written a couple recently where my muse went awol. As I finished the first line, the musical beat and flow started up. I really like where you went with these lyrics, how did they come about Bunny? What came first beat or words?

Chris

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Then we both start with words and the melody sets in soon after :) Being a drummer you do have an ad.. read more
Robert Trakofler

3 Weeks Ago

it is funny how writing a lyric is so different from writing a poem you wouldn't think it so
Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

True enough. Until you try it, you won't know :) Happy Wednesday Bunny.

... Hey B B you just done good again ... superb wording .. I just love your various variables on the brush stroke theme ... and hey .. any one told ya before that you do a mean Robert Plant ... YOU R a National Treasure sir so U R ....

... Neville :)


Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler

3 Weeks Ago

I don't think i could come up with a nicer thing to say:) and i'm pretty good at nice! thank you Nev
Neville

3 Weeks Ago


.. always a pleasure :)
Refuge, they say, is a resorptive place you frequently visit in your dreams. . And you can't tell me there is no residue left
from a songs inspiration and that you don't eventually need treatment for it. A salve perhaps, or a liniment you twist the chalk top open when the muse is formal in the room with you. Songs like this are those of the 60's; Marvin Gaye songs that resonate with human life and the computable wealth of living....I'm thinking of Gaye's "Wonderful One" where the chorus implores an esteemed tempo worth repeating..."You're a wonderful one". Beautifully written....dana

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Robert Trakofler

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks Dana when I get some drums and guitar set up I will send you another link:) it’s always a n.. read more
So good! I'm dying to hear this! I'm on my phone right now with little data left. When I'm back on soundcloud I'll check this out!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Ana Papaya

3 Weeks Ago

Yes. I read the two poems. I don't sing though.
Not well. :)
Robert Trakofler

3 Weeks Ago

well is till say you have a lovely voice in those readings and in those lyrics:) so there!
Ana Papaya

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks very much. I appreciate that. :)
Interesting dancing and skipping piece with harmonic rhyming in lyrical eulogy to this special muse to whom you pay homage!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Robert Trakofler

3 Weeks Ago

Hi john it always strikes me odd how different writing lyrics is versus poetry it really comes from .. read more

Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

177 Views
9 Reviews
Rating
Added on September 1, 2020
Last Updated on September 1, 2020
Tags: national treasure, Lyrics, poetry, Robert Trakofler, muse

Author

Robert Trakofler
Robert Trakofler

pittsburgh, PA



About
I am the Bunny but the bunny isn't me long live the bunny Hello I’m Robert I own an art gallery and performance space in Pittsburgh called The Zenith It is also an antique store and a veget.. more..

Writing

Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


Hee-Haw Hee-Haw

A Poem by AJNJ