Critical I

Critical I

A Poem by Robert Trakofler
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Rough draft from this morning:) I wrote this after reading his poem discarded https://www.writerscafe.org So I blame Neville for this one... please express any regrets from reading this to Mr. Neville

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This malady of manuscription

Is making me go mad…

The prescription for this affliction

Is more composition?

And this would seem a contradiction

More like an addiction!

I dream in words both real and of fiction

I even check diction;

To make sure the flow has no friction

Or meanings constriction!

To indite these scenes of depiction

In a pure transcription

Makes personal your recognition

Within your cognition

As I petition your disposition

To come to fruition

In a brand new grand… proposition!

This golden subscription

I fear is my only nutrition.

For it is only a matter of time

Before I end up

In a padded cell

With a foam rubber podium

And a toy

Microphone

© 2020 Robert Trakofler


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So very relatable, dear Robert! We all have this issue at times; trying to perfect our words on the page while also trying to capture flow, rhythm, meter and all other associated poetic devices. Sometimes it can leave us tearing our hair out and wondering just why it is not working when at other times it all comes together effortlessly. It's our creative curse to bear and one which just drives us onwards to perfect our craft. I'll prescribe coffee, meditation and a breathing session and then I am sure you will avoid the rubber walled rooms. Keep pushing the muse and she will respond in kind. Creative expression as always, dear Robert!

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Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

she loves me Jamila... I am the luckiest guy i know:)
jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

she certainly does love you, we can tell, brother bunny...
and are you sure that toy micropho.. read more
Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

I think it’s one of those magic microphones from ronco you know the one that makes an echo



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Oh, the worries of a poet before posting a poem. We edit, then edit again. The mountain of crumpled paper grows beside us. Rhyming can be addicting, but who wants to kick the habit? A padded cell might be going a bit too far, but the microphone would come in handy in a coffee house. I enjoyed this one. Lydi**

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Robert Trakofler

1 Week Ago

thanks Lydia its all Nevs fault:)
What a lovely, crazy world of words this is! I love the rhyming in this poem, dear Bunny. I don't mind padded cells if I have words to keep me company and I'll share that microphone. Words are addicting, Aren't they?

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

I was in a silly mood when I wrote this but I must admit there is a bit of truth to this:) I may be .. read more
It's this way, Bunny: There are those who don't like to write, and then there are those who can't not write. You seem to be in category 2, boyo. Live with it.

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Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

at least until it kills me:)


... sir, I write to inform you I have not had a moments peace since ya posted this .. my in box has been inundated with all manner of ....

... wickedly well worded Wobert ...

... Neville :)

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

LOL i really went out on a frenzy after reading your poem:)
Neville

2 Weeks Ago


............... I feel as if I've been written alive :)
That would no doubt cause you to have a conniption

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

I should probably change my prescription
I'm definitely catching a strong wave of how frantic it feels to be inside the head of a writer who's driven to write, to please, to rewrite, to ponder, to fret, & all that stuff we writers tend to do. Love the way the pace is harried & hurried, with excellent rhymes. Fortunately, I do not have this affliction. I only think about a poem for the 15 or 30 minutes I spend actually writing it. After performing useful functions, my mind always goes blank for a bit (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

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Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

hmm... I hate you:/ lol
barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

I love you! *tee! hee!*
Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

:) :) :) :) :) :)
The rhyming wordplay is one of your signature features and one |I could never attempt to emulate. There is of course a serious side to this comedic piece as the ending tells!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

words never stop flowing in my head and some days it wont stop rhyming twice these two past days I h.. read more
The first lines pretty much says it all and the rest just packages it nicely.
Just read Neville's poem earlier. I like the inspiration you drew from it

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Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

thanks Ana he is good at that
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So very relatable, dear Robert! We all have this issue at times; trying to perfect our words on the page while also trying to capture flow, rhythm, meter and all other associated poetic devices. Sometimes it can leave us tearing our hair out and wondering just why it is not working when at other times it all comes together effortlessly. It's our creative curse to bear and one which just drives us onwards to perfect our craft. I'll prescribe coffee, meditation and a breathing session and then I am sure you will avoid the rubber walled rooms. Keep pushing the muse and she will respond in kind. Creative expression as always, dear Robert!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

she loves me Jamila... I am the luckiest guy i know:)
jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

she certainly does love you, we can tell, brother bunny...
and are you sure that toy micropho.. read more
Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

I think it’s one of those magic microphones from ronco you know the one that makes an echo

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Robert Trakofler
Robert Trakofler

pittsburgh, PA



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I am the Bunny but the bunny isn't me long live the bunny Hello I’m Robert I own an art gallery and performance space in Pittsburgh called The Zenith It is also an antique store and a veget.. more..

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