Spit and polish

Spit and polish

A Poem by Robert Trakofler
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Rough draft of a little scrawl I started and can't seem to finish or did I?

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All polish and no spit

That’s what they will say

What a terrible waste

Of a god given gift

In the words he type faced

In the positions he placed

Bearing such minimal sway

 

All spit and no polish

Fraught with so much cliché

Trite thoughts with no flash

In each lines dot and dash

Just no sense of panache

This form is simply passé

Shouldn’t be bound for display

© 2021 Robert Trakofler


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Gee
Of course we want our writing to be acceptable, liked, by other writers, but firstly we must write for ourselves and not get lulled into writing what we " think" others want from us. But you know this as well as anyone Mr Robert :))
Happy new year to you Robert, fingers crossed your business will be up and running sooner rather than later.


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Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

because you so cleverly caught the grasp of my infers Ill tell you the thoughts behind this little s.. read more
Gee

2 Weeks Ago

I see you feel very passionately about this Robert. There are some fine writers on here, you obviou.. read more



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.............. tis done and tis done well.. so very bloomin well my friend ... so sit back with a cuppa strong coffee and enjoy ................

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First of all, considering how wonderful the WC community is, where each of us inspire, teach, discuss and stimulate each other's literary expeditions, no matter how experienced or how naïve we are in the arena, we really understand in a very unsnobbish way, how to segregate good poetry from bad, never discouraging in the process.
I agree with you, dear Bunny, that here we have some marvelous gems, many of which are your own, that deserve a reading in the tradition of the canonical literature.


Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Well - yikes, not sure at who this is directed at, if it’s your writing there is spit and polish. However, if it’s aimed at other poets you read, excluding the classics, then ouch, not painful to me because I hate my own crap and know I suck but I think there are excellent poets on many websites and yes there are novices but they enjoy what they do just as I do and I have no dreams of grandeur I just love to express myself. But no not yours, you are a fine writer.

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Patricia

2 Weeks Ago

Ahhh I see what you mean now, I can get behind that. I can find the good in every write unless it go.. read more
Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

that last line made me chuckle!
Patricia

2 Weeks Ago

My father used to tell me that no matter how good you think you are there is someone better and you .. read more
It feels pretty finished to me! It's got a nice flow. I like the twist on the starting line in the second stanza. I think every writer can relate to the feeling that everything you write has been written before and it just seems so cliche reading it back. That's a normal part of the writing process and just means that your taste is improving. But I think the people who feel that way are usually not the worst offenders when it comes to terrible, cliche, angsty poetry. The worst offenders generally have no idea how bad their poem is

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Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

LOL, no one will ever accuse me of self-aggrandizing I am the worst and most contemptible self-criti.. read more
Though it is a quest to keep getting better at what I do. This compulsion I (we, all of us here) have is to create. Hopefully the little splinters of my mind is stacked neat enough, that those idea's are understood and enjoyed. In turn, when I tickle across the pages to read another's work your words always gives me joy.

So when it comes to ...all polish and no spit...
I say there is more than one way to skin a cat (story).

PS no cat's were harmed in the writing of this review.
:)

PSS HAPPY NEW YEAR

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Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

LOL, Did you mean more than one way to skin a bunny:) This new year is going to be wonderful dear Ch.. read more
Since I've known you, I've been aware you're hard on yourself, as far as judging yourself as you grind over the acceptability of your writing. I also realize most other writers are similarly self-critical, but I never envisioned how that looks or sounds or feels until I read this poem. You convey this conundrum with palpable details. The reason I don't bother with worrying how my writing will go over is becuz all my life I've been a misfit that most people do not understand & even those who do, do not rush back for another serving of my obtuse way of being. But still, you are one of the most beloved writers here at the cafe, to a TON of other writers, yet you are pretty damn hard on yourself! Here's hoping the new year won't be too hard on you as well! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

PS -- most writers at the cafe would KILL for 90 views in 24 hours . . . I'm just saying!

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Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

LOL you mean you don't have a little devil and angel on each of your shoulders poking each other wit.. read more
barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

Only Lola clawing my paws off the keyboard when she feels I've been stroking it long enuf & it's tim.. read more
I think you made your point, Bunny. It's something like the difference between prose and poetry, with the latter being the polish (But don't tell the Poles I said that; might inflate their egos.).

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Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks, brother John I will keep the poem as is then:)
Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

oh yeah and screw those poles anywho
I just left another website for the new year. The writing there was awful. They have a one-track mind when it comes to topics and that topic is usually about sex. Awful stuff. I couldn't stand it anymore so here I am once again.

I understand your disappointment with published poetry these days. Sylvia, Frost, and others left marks that can't be duplicated. I always try to write as simple as I can but I try to learn to from others. I rarely read a bad poem from you, Christine, John the Baptist, Jacob or Richard, Kelly, and others. Barleygirl blocked me but I won't go into that. haha.

WC just seems more reliable to me which is why I always come back.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

What site were you on? so I can avoid that one too LOL It really is true the people in here are amaz.. read more
 Relic

2 Weeks Ago

Deep Underground Poetry. There are a few good poets but there are some vile people and writing there.. read more
Though I don't contribute to other 'poetry sites,' I quite often take a look see; and what I find is that there is far too much formulaic 'disposable pop,' on offer nowadays; much of which garners entirely undeserving plaudits.

As for the world of publishing. It's always been the bottom line that counts. Mind you, doesn't that also tend to be the case with many a poem. :))

Such a shame really, but we can only persevere with our writing; and as jacob says, the best that can come from a pen will always be the words WE want to write.

Beccy.

So many good poets here

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Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

I can't emphasize it enough dear Beccy the writing in here is far superior to these "national forums.. read more
i probably shouldn't review this because i am not much of a poet,( not looking for accolades) but I have also tried reading 'poetry' elsewhere and find most of it is terrible, at least I don't relate at all and I agree that most of what I read here is definitely much better.
Although, there are some writers/writes/topics here that I don't feel comfortable with and I always find reviewing to be a difficulty, which is why I do so little.
I always look at poetry more as fun with rhymes than anything else and when I have to wade through confusing gibberish I just look elsewhere
Please carry on with serving up your very good works

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Robert Trakofler

2 Weeks Ago

Dave (I know you said you weren't fishing) but i beg to differ you are a clever writer and entertain.. read more

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