Bunny

...imagine...

Two powerful dragons united side by side
One mission and one purpose to crawl inside
Channeling every being as we seek to control
Stealing the energy from every powerless soul

Harnessing our darkness yet embracing our light
Keeping each other in check as we hold each other tight
Casting a circle on the Fantasy dance floor
Sharing our energy as we drain others' cores

Stolen moments intertwined underneath the starlit sky
Energy transference and intoxication making us high
Astral projection, fingers interlocked, we travel through time
When witches meet it's always by universal design

Exchanged glances and words not spoken
For each of us this was merely a token
What's my energy like, I flirtatiously asked
Tempting, you sighed, you're like an energizer bunny on crack

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

This is awesome...every line is perfect, every image is razor-sharp, and the emotion is beyond palpable...I'd kill to be one of the pair in question here...so much passion, and such an amazing poem...I can't say enough about this one my friend...I'm blown away.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Wow! Really? I wrote this one when I was done partying for the night with a delightful stranger--I was in my "drinking mood"--and this was definitely an intoxicated write--NO love interest involved as my muse for this one either--I just felt the words flow through me, and then tweaked a word or two when I was sober. I'm really glad that you like it though--just trying to capture another side of self--flirtatious and a bit comical--with some magic thrown in. Thank you for your review!

[kublakhan27]

Haha The fact that I never have nights like that probably factored into my affinity for it...I must either read about it or write about it, and I can't write about it this well...guess you need experience to do that haha Again, fantastic job :)

[genocide]

very nice words and description i love it

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you. I'm happy you enjoyed!

[Bluefire]

I love the wordplay and imagery in this. It's enchanting and amusing at the same time.
Well done. ^^

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you! Amusement was my goal :-)

[Bluefire]

No problem! ^^

[Madalyn Beck]

I agree with KL's review below. Not only that, but the last line I feel many of us have heard, including myself. (:

[FlamingPhoenix]

Only the best naughty girls ;-). I do agree--which is why that last line inspired me to write this piece...thank you for the review!

[FlamingPhoenix]

Funny though~I've never heard a woman say it~just men in their 20's.

[Lyn Anderson]

I was wondering how it was going to make it around to bunny. And funny, I have been accused of the very same thing with the very same wording ...

[FlamingPhoenix]

Yeah--it's one of my most favorite modern lines! I get it a lot when I'm in 'cougar' mode ;-)

[Chris Micha]

Very intoxicating piece here and very unique. I like that celestial aspect of it as well. Very well done! :)

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you! I'm pleased that you enjoyed.

[melissa]

This is awesome poem keep up the great work i can't wait to read more

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thanks :-D

[melissa]

You're welcome

[A. Amos]

Now this one made me smile thank you

[FlamingPhoenix]

You are very welcome--thank you!

[Saddam]

Exchanged glances and words not spoken
Tonight was merely for each other a token
What's my energy like, I flirtatiously asked
Tempting, you sighed, you're like an energizer
bunny on crack.

So hilarious dear. Excellent write, good uses of words.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you~this was written in a rather inebriated moment--I'm glad it makes sense! Thank you for your review.

[Bright Ocean Star]

and people thought my poem was suggestive and sensual....Yours packs a powerful punch....the visual I"m getting reading this is making it necessary for me to go outside for some fresh air. Incredible. Awesome write (as always), Phoenix. the only part I'm not sure of is the last part of the first stanza...."Every soul that we see as we seek to control/stealing the energy from every powerless soul." the last soul does effectively rhyme with control, and is a good match for it, but since you used soul earlier in the line, it throws it off a bit...at least in my head....maybe it's just me. but it's a small issue. Otherwise, great, great write!

[FlamingPhoenix]

I wrote this while intoxicated. Let me know what you think of my sober edit ;-)

[Bright Ocean Star]

much better! Thanks for fixing it! :)