If I were her

If I were her

A Poem by Flo

mothers who expect too much from their daughters


 If I were the girl you dreamed about

If I were that tall, model thin, smart girl

Would you stop neglecting me?

Would you stop taking me as something not worth to look at or see?

Would you start smiling at me, instead of frowning down?

Would you start encouraging me to do more?

But sadly, I am not that tall, model thin, smart girl

I'm that average sized, pale faced one

The one that you never liked

The one whom you always with hateful thorns you spiked

If your seeking for perfection, why bother with humans?

You might as well get a robot instead

© 2009 Flo

Author's Note

mothers whom always expect too much, weird how nowadays, mothers are pushing their daughters into being incredibly model like, while even the model themselves aren't that perfect, enjoy and tell me what you think about that subject

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Sure, looks are somewhat important, but I always liked the smart, funny girls, who had personality, and were kind and maybe even a little nerdy lol..

If that's weird, then thats fine with me.

Great poem, I really enjoyed it.
Antonio :)

Posted 10 Years Ago

I could write an essay on mothers, but won't. Because they shape your life, regardless of the damage they cause, and after all, they're human and a product of their mothers...........remember you are a human and a wonderful one.

Posted 10 Years Ago

Ohmygod, I love this. Its so true, but I think it can be interpretted in a different way, like not written for a mother, but maybe a guy.

Posted 10 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

so true that's what i wonder nowadays but some times the craziness off these days get to my head and i end up not eating for a while or crying about things i cant change even though i beautiful. But not to other peoples extremes. Great poem

Posted 10 Years Ago

I really hope this isnt based off a true story :( (you in mean). great poem. I could feel the emotions in her, like the girl with the bad mother was writing it. Good job

Posted 10 Years Ago

certainly true in our mundane, everyday lives. it's really realistic. great work

Posted 10 Years Ago

Ah! The relationship between mothers and daughter is a very compound one filled with joy and pain. What if you are the daughter who was beautiful, with the world at her feet and the mother was jealous ? It can go either way. I am not sure there is a perfect mother n daughter relationship anywhere. Though, I've always wanted the opportunity to love a daughter as she deserved to be. Won't happen in this life time.
Well done with heart-felt emotion that must be painful to so many.

Posted 10 Years Ago

Those beautiful woman have their problems too. In a life we learn beauty is skin deep. A powerful poem. Your last lines told the story. Being different makes this world a fun place to live.

Posted 10 Years Ago

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true enough

Posted 10 Years Ago

really good one... you touched an untouched subject.. really liked your idea of writing about it.. it's really very good.. everything about this poem is just perfect... great work!

Posted 10 Years Ago

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Added on November 13, 2009



city of randomness and insanity :3

o-o I dunno, born in a hospital, living in a home and studying in a school......o-o randomness fills me Sadness grieves me happiness completes me Love confuses and plays with me life pranks me.. more..


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