Ruined

Ruined

A Poem by Flutterby aish

I'm not sure,
But its happening I guess
Last Night I felt,
My heart beats were at rest
I was surprised,
I Felt for my nerves
Faint and faded,
Lost their purpose
I realized that instant,
I had lost the battle
Not like it was the first,
But this time it was fatal
Poisoning every inch of me,
That's what your love did
Killing me slowly,
As the venom spread
You didn't break me,
You tore me apart
What was once sedating with life
Is now a ruined heart!

© 2015 Flutterby aish


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Flutterby aish
So...what say guys?

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AHHH, the pains of love. I can totally relate to this. I can feel the pain in this one. Good descriptions and nice use of words. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Ah.. the love's just messy. It often gets messed up with heart. Sometimes, in a good way so sometimes, in a very bad way. Your poetry's very emotional that speaks directly from the core of your very heart. You've nicely shaped your words & managed the conception of love with the subject. Nice flow of ink.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Flutterby aish

5 Years Ago

Thank you for reading.
It was alright I suppose.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Flutterby aish

5 Years Ago

I wrote it out of boredom. i'm glad its even alright.... hahaa :D . BTW, thnx for reading.
Brilliant! Tender and yet touches you hard! I can feel it- there what you say! That's what you got to do and you have done it with sheer excellence! It breaks us as we read it and goes straight to the heart! The way everything led was perfect! And the sadness in it- it is visible! This one is raw and I love raw ones! I can't specifically say which part I loved, because everything was slow and passionate read! Slow feels! Every letter increasing my feels for it! That's what your poem has done!
P.S.- I sent read request to you of your own poem. I was sending mine and this tab was open and I clicked suddenly. I am too crazy! Lol.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Flutterby aish

5 Years Ago

hahaa....its ok. And I appreciate your craziness cause I have a lot of it dwelling within myself too.. read more
Rainslover

5 Years Ago

Great to find people who are as crazy as you are!
Flutterby aish

5 Years Ago

Lolz! :D ;)
You create sad and lonely place in the poetry.
"You didn't break me,
You tore me apart"
This is what love can do. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote


Posted 5 Years Ago


Flutterby aish

5 Years Ago

Thank you for reading. :D
Coyote Poetry

5 Years Ago

You are welcome.

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