The Darkness

Somewhere
Far back
Hidden
Crouched
In a corner
Of my mind

Something
A touch
A feeling
A thought
Pawing
Gnawing
Clawing

Somehow
Escapes
Runs wild
Destroys
Tears down

Someway
Stirs up
More things
A whirl
Swirl
Of dark

Someone
Reaches out
A ray
Of light
The dark
Recedes.

Author's Note

I just really like this format! but not sure if it makes sense...? And I feel like the rhythm is off. What do y'all think?

Reviews

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSh..]

I have written pieces like this before. It is because this is how the words flow through you. I write them dramatic, staggered and intentional this way they are read and come across with the correct foundation of thought. Poetry is an organization of words to express emotions, perceptions, life events ..... That is exactly what you did here. Don't worry so much about format just write, feel and let it flow. Rip in to your core and set the Poet free.
I was drawn into the piece immediately significant descriptive words came pawing, gnawing and clawing just under the surface of each line. This Poetry my friend !

Sheer Terror

[flyingfree]

Thank you so much SheerTerror! Now I can write my poems without worrying too much .

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

You are welcome flying free

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Being able to reach out to others in those dark times is a choice that makes sense. We need someone there. Not being afraid to ask for help is a wise step.

[flyingfree]

Unfortunately I learned that the hard way...
But writing helps me get my emotions through

[flyingfree]

Sorry! Format didn't go as expected.....
It looks bad if I can't get the format, doesn't it?
Each line of each verse is supposed to be moved a little to the right of the line before (looks like stairs)