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Go ahead; Try

Go ahead; Try

A Poem by FocusedAmnesia
"

Break me down. I'll get back up.

"
Go ahead:
Try to break me down.
Upset me to no end.
Piss me off until I want to cry.

Go ahead:
Watch my every move.
Yell at me for what you let others get away with.
Blame me for something I didn't do.

Give me hell.
Make me stressed.
Act like a child.

You can try all you like,
To get me down,
But you're nothing compared,
to what I've been through,
And at nineteen, I'm more mature,
then all of you. Pathetic.

© 2010 FocusedAmnesia


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LOVED THE STRENGTH AND FRUSTRATION! It had anger and frustration written all over it and even the word strong. It sounds very powerful! I liked it very much!
"Watch my every move.
Yell at me for what you let others get away with.
Blame me for something I didn't do."
Did I mention there is a lot of confidence in this too? Anyways fantastic poem and I really enjoyed reading it! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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totally powerful and liberating.
i can just imagine you after writing this going from angry to content.

oh, and the fact that i can relate to this makes it even better. i love the way certain words are in bold. makes them just that more important.

Posted 8 Years Ago


wow, the most prominent feature to your amazing poem imo, is the
emotionally raw and vindicated chord. as every sentence is
structured with an emtional implication, the simplicty makes this poem
amazingly easy to grasp, which adds to the over reader impact.
the meaning reminds me of being able to view a situation
through a clearer understanding then those around whcih
i'm sure many can relate to in ne way or another, magnificent job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


LOVED THE STRENGTH AND FRUSTRATION! It had anger and frustration written all over it and even the word strong. It sounds very powerful! I liked it very much!
"Watch my every move.
Yell at me for what you let others get away with.
Blame me for something I didn't do."
Did I mention there is a lot of confidence in this too? Anyways fantastic poem and I really enjoyed reading it! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It's heartfelt. I can respect that. But I would like to see your hurt and injustice with imagery. Like: Go ahead, make my heart rend with your venomous accusations.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Good. I could see the emotion and the feelings of frustration that you wrote this with. Powerful. The short sentences worked wonders. The ending was awesome. Great choice of words too that convey your message beautifully.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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