Mandolin's Melody

I'll play thee a sonnet with mandolin

    softly massage your brow of sad sorrow

absorb anguish so that joy may begin

 bringing bright new light into each 'morrow

 

I'll sing thee mandolin's melody

  sweetest songs of love, each note to behold

chasing gray clouds away, too far to see

 kiss thy lips warm, when winter's breath breathes cold

O' hear my love song enchanting this day

  with poetry's whispered words to thy ear

 of summer's breeze and lavender's bouquet

sunshine and laughter our hearts may endear

          I'll play thee a sonnet meant for just you

                         mandolin's melody with love so true

    

 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love the word crafting in the first line, introducing your well-crafted sonnet as a musical creation (which it very much is) . . . you're SHOWING as well as TELLING this combo idea between writing & making music. I appreciate that your gently elevated language is still clear & easy to follow, not using convoluted language like some sonnets do. Good word choices add much imagery thru-out.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so much for the lovely comments on my poetry..i so appreciate..😀

[wordman]

a beautiful song of love with all the trimmings,lavender boquets,sunlight

[Fran Marie]

Thanks ..so very much, Appriciated;

[wordman]

you are welcome

[ThackeryBinx]

That was beautiful Fran. Can you really play the mandolin? Your words are as sweet as any melody a tune can sing.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so very much,

[Tina Kline]

A very beautiful, tender and romantic love sonnet.
Just exquisite work!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so much,Tina

[Tina Kline]

You are very very welcome.

[Matching Socks]

A beautiful and romantic sonnet.
I love your Romantic poems Fran Marie, you do this so effortlessly.

[Fran Marie]

awh, thanks Ana, so glad you enjoyed, I so appreciate your reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

So Romantic and Elegant
I love Sonnets.


Thank you for sharing
this wonderful piece and for your
kind review and comments left on my page.





O' hear my love song enchanting this day

with poetry's whispered words to thy ear

of summer's breeze and lavender's bouquet

sunshine and laughter our hearts may endear




I'll play thee a sonnet meant for just you

mandolin's melody with love so true



blessings. Benita

[Fran Marie]

thanks so very much, Benita, so appreciated;

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

you're welcome. :)

[GothGranny]

Belated Congratulations on your beauteous sonnet!!!:)

[MomzillaNC]

Beautiful sonnet. Exquisite line: " kiss thy lips warm, when winter's breath breathes cold"

[Fran Marie]

thanks MomzillaNC,so very much;

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Fran, this is really beautiful. Your word choice is excellent in this one. The tone is soft and romantic....the mandolin is definitely the instrument of lovers. Great write!

[Fran Marie]

thanks Star, so much appreciated;

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this piece is enchanting...
a mandolin's love song is beautiful...

and playing a sonnet to him would warm his soul....poetry is definitely a bouquet of words.

[Fran Marie]

thanks Jacob, so very much;

[myself]

Love it! Beautifully written and such a great choice of words! I truly enjoyed reading it!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so very much;

[AprilRN1210]

oooooooh girl!... ok.. gotta stop and take a breath after that... you had my mind dancing with the alliteration and rhymes.. oh yes!.. then you added gorgeous imagery, and sweet, gentle emotion that warms the heart.. this one has a little bit of everything tied up in a romantic melody alright.. amazing as usual. you know I am a fan.. A.W.E.S.O.M.E.

one suggestion.. (just my opinion..)..

" bringing bright new light into each 'morrow".... would switch around "new" in this one.. flows better in my head.. (bringing bright light into each new 'morrow)

[Fran Marie]

Thanks April so very much, I so Appriciate your great reviews on my poetry... Have to keep that line as is..don't like light after bright...and new before morrow doesn't sound right...but thanks for the suggestion..I do appreciate it...