`Mercy~Her Sigh`

My Sonnet based on Ophelia from Shakespears "Hamlet" Her thoughts as she lay dying

 

 

She sighs his name with her last dying breath

he her wind in the ashes of death

she pleadsby faint light of sad blishish moon

bellowing mercy~her departure soon

her shadowed soul death may escort from pain

her spirit has died as willows weep in the rain

life intolerable,misery doth claim

she grieves and does think herself quite insane

now quietly she slips into a watery grave

relaesing her soul to the winds of space

she conceded with saddened heavy heart

Mercy appealed~oh that gods do their part

yes,'tis but glory which doth await in death

and his name she did sigh,with last dying breath

Reviews

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The great old spirit of romanticism � so many people are confused here, think romanticism is that happy go lucky thing about fluffy valentine's day presents � if only they read Goethe � Romanticism � the almighty omnipresence of nature: including that Saturnian revelation that upon the dying breath there flows a moment of eternity �

[Sukriti Suki]

This is so beautiful. The emotion so pure, so intense. Lovely work.

[J. Araujo]

Beautiful

[Katie B]

This is another great piece for the Ophelia contest. This one really tugs at the heart strings because most of us can relate to pinning away from someone who doesn't seem to know we are there.

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

beautifully written

[imm's place]

a wonderful melancholy write, loved it, mary

[~ Tex]

Beautiful work. I see a nice critique below with wonderful suggestions.

My one thought is that "Gods" should be gods. Since "God" is a proper name in monotheism, whereas 'god' or 'gods' refers to any worshipped dieties when not using their proper name.

Wonderful write and easy to read flow. Love the font choice and use of font as a part of the message.

[Dead Angel]

such a romantic piece! i love the old english dialouge you put, it added to the peom's elegance. very creative! :)

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

And his name did she sigh, with her last dying breath, beautiful ending, the photo is well suited to the story.

[M I N D Y]

how very Shakespearean of you.

the flow is smooth as silk, the rhyme soft and perfect...

Shakespeare himself would be proud. Bravo!