My Sweet Leroy

My Sweet Leroy

A Poem by Fran Marie
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entry for `The Blue Rose Café Edgar Allen Poe. Phrase Challenge`

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"Once upon a midnight dreary

 while I pondered weak and weary"

 my mind wandered, my spirit bent

  deep, deep down to hell's decent


Killing Leroy; a failed attempt

he lies in blood,his life half spent

outside chamber doors, 'tis pouring rain

from whence his cheating heart had came


'Tis a shame; a sad tale to tell

the devil to claim, his soul to sell

my sweet Leroy, had hurt my pride

with knife in hand I waited inside


As he walked through the chamber door

I rushed to kiss his lips once more

then plunged the knife deep to his heart

yes, my sweet Leroy, would soon depart


Now near death, no regrets have I

No sorrow or tears left to cry..

I too shall follow thee into death

as I slit my wrists, and draw love's last breath.

© 2015 Fran Marie


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Hell, so it is said, hath no fury like a woman scorned. The speaker in this one gives credence to that old saying. Whoever Leroy was, he cheated on her and paid the price. The Poe imagery highlights this murder/suicide tale, and we can almost see the angry and unrepentant heroine as she turns the bloody blade on herself. Not one to read late at night if you're by yourself.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

5 Months Ago

Thanks John
I used the name
Leroy as a takeoff
on " my sweet Lenore"
Poe.. read more



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Wow! Revenge and suicide all in the same poem. Excellent rendition.

Posted 5 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

5 Months Ago

thanks Tim,
yea kinda of
dark..i know
I appreciate
your words;
Whoa! Fran... the depths of despair can be
a Bosom full of revenge... be still and listen to the Wind... waves crashing and hearts breaking... into oblivion. Amen Pat

Posted 5 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

5 Months Ago

thanks Pat
for your words
yea h I know
right? those
depths o f despair<.. read more
Hell, so it is said, hath no fury like a woman scorned. The speaker in this one gives credence to that old saying. Whoever Leroy was, he cheated on her and paid the price. The Poe imagery highlights this murder/suicide tale, and we can almost see the angry and unrepentant heroine as she turns the bloody blade on herself. Not one to read late at night if you're by yourself.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

5 Months Ago

Thanks John
I used the name
Leroy as a takeoff
on " my sweet Lenore"
Poe.. read more
This poem is both beautiful and darkly haunting in its message. Sometimes jilted love can turn so tragic! You wrote this beautifully, dear Fran!

Posted 5 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

5 Months Ago

many thanks
dear Share
for reading
and the kind words
I appreciate;
A poetic tale of heartbreak and vengeance full of pathos and drama written in superb AABB rhyming scheme and one that I found very exciting to read. I've read a bit of Poe and I loved this poem

Posted 5 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

5 Months Ago

thanks AJ
s o very much
for the kind review
glad you enjoyed
this one; <.. read more
AJNJ

5 Months Ago

It was a pleasure Ms. Fran!
Check points for making the rhyming scheme like Poe's is! This is a great plot and great ending. There's a sad death, check; a somber message, check; insanity, check; pondering with oneself, check!
I think this is fantastic! Thanks for entering my contest!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Saree Marcel

2 Years Ago

i love pie! and poe ;)
  Fran Marie

2 Years Ago

Haha ..my smart phone us smarter than me. I say Poe and it writes pie..I guess that could be my new .. read more
Saree Marcel

2 Years Ago

YES HAHAHAHAAHAH
Folks must be in the Halloween spirit, as this is the second one I've read in a short sitting where the woman is stabbing the guy! Your writing construction is superb & altho I'm not very familiar with Poe's works, this sounds every bit as polished & well-crafted as a celebrated poet would produce. Usually I'm not very good at reading this stilted language, but yours is crystal clear & relatable.

Posted 4 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

4 Years Ago

Thanks so very much for the kind comments.i so appreciate
.☺
very cool piece .. very haunting and dark.. love the last lines .. nice job

Posted 5 Years Ago


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I think the ghost of Vincent Price or Christopher lee joined in on this too, because those were the voices I heard reading it. How wonderful would that be to have them do the spoken word version of this wonderful write, full of Poe-esque, fear and flow. Wonderfully written Fran Marie. I really enjoyed the rhythm of it.

Posted 5 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

5 Years Ago

yes, that would be something...love Vincent Price.. he was the Master of fright for sure,,
t.. read more
alifeacoustic

5 Years Ago

You're very welcome.
Oooh, this was so good! I love the name Leroy, and the "my sweet Leroy" adds an element that says "you may have betrayed me, but I have all the power."

Posted 5 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

5 Years Ago

thanks so much, Leigh, for reviewing..

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