yielding sweetly

Pantoum form

` yielding sweetly`

                        

When changing seasons make no sense
still springtime brings to us new snows
yet, somehow, lies, season's recompense
yielding sweetly life's delicate new rose

Still springtime brings to us new snows
then sunlight appears to warm the days
Yielding sweetly life's delicate new rose
blossoming beauties with summer's fine ways

Then sunlight appears to warm the days
breezes whisper thru~lofty trees high
Blossoming beatuies with summer's fine ways
as gentle raindrops fall from heaven's blue sky

Breezes whisper thru~lofty trees high
kissing all nature with a misty morning dew
As gentle raindrops fall from heaven's blue sky
each blade of wet grass, green and renewed

Kissing all nature with a misty morning dew
While behind the scenes,amending a vast expanse
Each blade of wet grass, green and renewed
when changing seasons make no sense

 

 

Author's Note

Pantoum:

The lines are grouped into quatrains (4-line stanzas).

The final line of the Pantoum must be the same as its first line.

A Pantoum has any number of quatrains.

Lines may be of any length.

The Pantoum has a rhyme scheme of abab in each quatrain. Thus, the lines rhyme alternately.

The Pantoum says everything twice:

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and edit needed here and there, but you did the form so well...and this has a delightful texture to it...I feel the spring in your words...

j.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Jacob, glad you enjoyed..

[barleygirl]

You have done a great job of applying the necessary requirements of this poetry form. I'm not a big fan of repeating lines just to follow rules. In this poem, the effect is a little mixed up, to my reading. Thus, the first & last lines are more appropriate to me, than perhaps you've planned for this write. It feels like the seasons are all mixed up, thru-out the flow of this piece. But everything is stated very creatively & gently, bringing much imagery & soft imaginings as one reads along.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, BG, so much appriciate It..

[mattavelli]

Hi, Fran, thank you for joining my contest. :)
This is a beautiful phantom about the changing seasons. You gave the nature personality.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Matt, so vey much appriciated;

[mattavelli]

Hello, Fran! :)
This is a lovely poem. Your seasons are peaceful, each fading into the next.
I think I like it more today, because I recall being fed up with the pantoum form after writing my first, five years ago. I remember the writing gave me a headache. Haha

[Fran Marie]

omygosh
I had forgotten that
you ran this contest
your pantuom is flawless
read moreomygosh
I had forgotten that
you ran this contest
your pantuom is flawless
though..unlike mine
at any rate ..thanks
again ..im such a contest
addict ..youre right
they're a royal pain
to write..lol;

[ice]

This is a lovely pantoum, it deserved first prize in the contest..
Congratulations...:-)

[Desert Dreamer]

A peaceful view of the changing seasons, the repetition makes me feel the sunshine and the light breeze.

[Daniel]

I've always found pantoums to be enjoyable and this was no exception.

Great job! And thanks for entering my contest! Good luck.

=D

[Cold Coffee Magazine]

Format was great.

Superb!

Dav

[Fran Marie]

THanks for reading

[Greg the Bard]

patoum form: I have not heard of this. But if it is a style then I like it very much.I really like the font and the flow of the words. It reminds me of the 23 plasm. Great write