Illusions

Dark Poetry

 Hazy moonlight stretched across the night sky
as I gazed from my window at a starless night
I percieved visions~ myself a stone illusion
and gloom fell heavy 'pon my heart and soul
an illumation in grayish blue tone of rigor light
like none of which I've seen before
yet facination overwhelmed me
as zig-zagged shadows danced in confusion
across my darken bedroom floor
'Oh, what fate would befall me, no clue had I
Nor could I fathom what evil shadows had taken control
On this eve of dark December,strange illusions danced free
 at the stroke of midnight plus one hour more
 

 

Reviews

[None]

You really captured the night in this prized poem of yours. All the words come together to make a unique performance. Your words: "facination overwhelmed me as zig-zagged shadows danced in confusion across my darken bedroom floor" really grabbed me!

[~*666 Draven Von Tepes ..]

I like this alot great job sorry Im late on reviewing

[Dani California]

This is fantastic!

The timing of this piece is eerie. It was requested by Adela.
I was thinking you read my mind here.... though
I see you wrote it months ago. Hmm... illusion is right! lol

"an illumation in grayish blue tone of rigor light
like none of which I've seen before
yet facination overwhelmed me
as zig-zagged shadows danced in confusion
across my darken bedroom floor.."

Brilliant work!! One of my favorites of yours. Indeed...

[Mr. Misanthrope]

Wow!!! I can immediately say that this is going in my favourites section. I have wanted to write something like this for AGES, though inspiration never struck me. I'm still waiting though.

You convey every single detail with such graceful description, combining something like a full moon, if I can say that, with supernatural beings, angels being one of the more beautiful ones that instantly form in my mind.

Really, well done! I'll be sure to read this now and again when I try summoning my muse for poetic inspiration, an attempt to latch on to an intangible beauty.

Luke:)

[Forest Green]

Imagination thrown into the avenue of realism...mixed together with poetic strokes both colorful and meaning-filled.

Very nice work...!

[Gabrielle]

Beautiful. It is dark and melancholy. You have definately captured the darkness, and then you brought us into it. It leaves you feeling depressed. I love darker writes.

[The Mad Prophet]

Very nicely done, and thank you for submitting this in my contest. It is worthy to be apart of the Broken Mirror Piece, and I am glad you shared it with us.

Sentiments from your local Mad Prophet

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is awesome! really simply a spectacular piece of writing :)
Congratulations on winning the contest "The first of the broken piece mirror"
Very well deserved! :)

[Passion for Literature]

being a person of daisies and sunshine (LOL), I am not much into anything that has a dark connotation...however, this is an awesome piece...I love your image of you seeing yourself of a stone illusion that in itself is an fantastic visual, but when you depict your world with 'starless night', 'shadows danced in confusion', 'darken bedroom floor', 'dark December'...I felt the speaker was trapped in a place in their life which offers no escape...your reference to fate furnishes a hopeless emotion which we have all experienced.

VERY WELL WRITTEN!

[Angel's Lady]

Very beautiful imagery. Great write!

[maiarusm]

This is a nice piece. Fascinating and mysterious, a little bit mystical too... To note though, reread this piece as I've noticed a few mistakes in spelling and such. This piece would be even more captivating to the reader once they are no longer distracted by such small things.