Line

Line

A Poem by Fran Marie
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Senryu

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I'm an unused line

caught between your choice of words

erased from your mind

© 2010 Fran Marie


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This a powerful piece as it caused me to stop and think about things around me and the world as whole. The pure conveying of some thing more than what is merely stated as we see lines as the meaning of everything and nothing. We can see the depth of a souls perspective being unraveled before our very eyes and what truth have we learned to knowing something of the everything that comes together to make each of us whole and as individual parts of a larger picture of the world.


Great Job!!!!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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You are most welcome :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Fran Marie, this is excellent....the metaphor is one all of us at the cafe can relate to, for sure, and that last line is killer. Congatulations on your contest win! :-)


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ooh! I like this a lot.
Thank you for sharing.
Love All, Mejasha

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i like this... Great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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I don't kknow the first rule of Senryu? But this made sense! Being tossed hanging on fordear life to a piece of elastic. I think you are very clever being able to get the message across with so few words Fran...
Helen :-)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This a powerful piece as it caused me to stop and think about things around me and the world as whole. The pure conveying of some thing more than what is merely stated as we see lines as the meaning of everything and nothing. We can see the depth of a souls perspective being unraveled before our very eyes and what truth have we learned to knowing something of the everything that comes together to make each of us whole and as individual parts of a larger picture of the world.


Great Job!!!!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a lyrical Senryu at that! nicely done, Fran ... enjoyed this

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Wonderful job with this! What an analogy - I'm impressed :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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