Winds of November

Ae Feislighe Form

Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn
Leaf limb's,bare bough surrender
succumb to Nature's bottom

Crying Rains,sweep demanding
November's heavy downpours
Fall reigns,its fate, commanding
appearing dead,yet, endures

A Sleeping Moon regresses
undying in cold starkness
November's sky~depresses
rendering life to darkness

Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays

A Smiling Sun disappears
to a distant dark expanse
gray sky,sighs,and reappears
as November's winds still dance

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

well that's November no doubt ..i use to live in SD and sunny skies are rare in the summer, let alone in the fall..and those winds never stop blowing ..just change direction .. had to read several times to "get into" the rhythm of this rhyming ...i do not understand how the form fits ...with the double and triple rhyming??? so kept looking for that ..once i gave up and just read it i was able to enjoy the painting .. i think the alliterations are spaced nicely and balanced ..Irish poetry is filled with them eh!? Fall is one of my favorite seasons and here in the Ozarks the skies are not so bleak and the threats of winter not nearly so demanding ... the poem rather dark for glorious fall ...a creative and unique approach ... difficult form with syntax always a challenge ...almost precludes sticking to it ;) beautiful imagery as November disrobes the trees ..not sure what her "bottom" is .. i took it as bottoming out ..?
i think your first and last verses are the strong ones in this ..did you have to work and re-work many times? ;)
E.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks E. So much for reading..the triple rhyming are in lines one and three ending words in those lines in each stanza have three syllables..double rhyme ending words for lines two and four.. yes.. (bottom) in tbis poem is as hits bottom ..Octobers fall colors/ leafs turn brown and fall away.so yes this poem is a bit dark.. i added personification .. and yes i had to work this form for a couple of days.. but it all came together

[Einstein Noodle]

ahhhh syllables .. as if getting things down is not hard enough eh!? i was thinking rhyme ..where o where is a double and triple rhyme ;} duh ..i can be pretty dense sometimes ..really appreciate my enlightenment for the day ..

[Fran Marie]

Lol
. Not a problem.. some forms are quite difficult to understsnd.. thanks agsin my friend.😁

[John the Baptist]

This one is definitely not a hymn to November. The month is depicted as a bringer of foul weather, the advent of darkness and the weakening of the sun. And all this time I thought of it as beautiful foliage and the end at last of the oppressive climate change heat. I guess it is a matter of perspective. And anyway, I can deal with any season with a strategically placed glass of merlot.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

This is magnificent Fran. An outstanding ay of describing that month.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Dale..i s o appreciate
your kind words on my poem;

[Pete]

wow. what an excellent characterization of our eleventh month. for me, it will always be the grey month. true to form, so far our's here has been just as you describe. your skilled words dance off the page along with those winds. interesting format has taught me something new too. really terrific. bravo fran ... :)

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Pete so much, glad you
enjoyed , I appreciate your kind
words and thoughts on this one

[Arundass TP]

interesting and beautifully written. Keep it up

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Arundass TP
s o much appreciated;

[Serene Star]

Truly beautiful Fran
I love the imagery
And this poem all together makes me feel like i am at the park
Watches leaves fall
Enjoying the perfect Sunday :)

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Serene S
s o glad you enjoyed
this one.. I appreciate
your words;

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Fran... now a year later...
I read your poem again. It is even
more predictable that November winds
may be a time of destiny when the tides
are confused and the world is in a tidal
wave of discontent. I am fascinated by
the style... Ae Freislighe. May Autumn be
a blessing to you and yours. fondly, Pat

[Fran Marie]

Autumn greetings; dear Pat..thanks for reading yet again..I so appreciate your kind. reviews always;

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Fran Marie... it is now the end of December... we feel a loss with undressed trees having lost the leaves of autumn 🍂 glory. The rain has an awesome chill and dreams are filled with hopes of Spring. I appreciate your style of poetry. truly, Pat

[Fran Marie]

So true my dear friend. . I do enjoy each season with their own unique offerings of ever-changing elements .Autumn being my favorite. But as for now enjoying the chilling frosty weather..

Happy New year Pat

[wordman]

a sleeping moon and twinkling stars ,says it all,lovely

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Ron so vey much.
Merry Christmas

[wordman]

merry christman,you`re welcome

[Nolo Segundo]

Nicely done, Fran, but then your work always is.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Nolo..so very much appreciated..

[Wild Rose]

Fran Marie you are describing a tamed version of today here on the NW coast of England with SW Scotland twenty miles across the bay (Solway Firth)
The winds are not dancing > rushing; biting; cold >> Rain in buckets full each drop

So unlike when I saw the geese fly south awat from the cold to a place for winter sun and warmth >>>> Wish I could fly like a goose

[Fran Marie]

Your November sounds more blustery indeed..
Thanks so vey much WR for reviewing my poetry
read moreYour November sounds more blustery indeed..
Thanks so vey much WR for reviewing my poetry
I so appreciate..

[Wild Rose]

Seasonal gales hope we dont get them over Christmas
Lost power one year just as everything was ready to serve
Christmas diner by candle light > Ma in Law lived with us then (90 YO) said it was the best Christmas diner she could remember