Winds of November

Ae Feislighe Form

Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn
Leaf limb's,bare bough surrender
succumb to Nature's bottom

Crying Rains,sweep demanding
November's heavy downpours
Fall reigns,its fate, commanding
appearing dead,yet, endures

A Sleeping Moon regresses
undying in cold starkness
November's sky~depresses
rendering life to darkness

Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays

A Smiling Sun disappears
to a distant dark expanse
gray sky,sighs,and reappears
as November's winds still dance

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

well that's November no doubt ..i use to live in SD and sunny skies are rare in the summer, let alone in the fall..and those winds never stop blowing ..just change direction .. had to read several times to "get into" the rhythm of this rhyming ...i do not understand how the form fits ...with the double and triple rhyming??? so kept looking for that ..once i gave up and just read it i was able to enjoy the painting .. i think the alliterations are spaced nicely and balanced ..Irish poetry is filled with them eh!? Fall is one of my favorite seasons and here in the Ozarks the skies are not so bleak and the threats of winter not nearly so demanding ... the poem rather dark for glorious fall ...a creative and unique approach ... difficult form with syntax always a challenge ...almost precludes sticking to it ;) beautiful imagery as November disrobes the trees ..not sure what her "bottom" is .. i took it as bottoming out ..?
i think your first and last verses are the strong ones in this ..did you have to work and re-work many times? ;)
E.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks E. So much for reading..the triple rhyming are in lines one and three ending words in those lines in each stanza have three syllables..double rhyme ending words for lines two and four.. yes.. (bottom) in tbis poem is as hits bottom ..Octobers fall colors/ leafs turn brown and fall away.so yes this poem is a bit dark.. i added personification .. and yes i had to work this form for a couple of days.. but it all came together

[Einstein Noodle]

ahhhh syllables .. as if getting things down is not hard enough eh!? i was thinking rhyme ..where o where is a double and triple rhyme ;} duh ..i can be pretty dense sometimes ..really appreciate my enlightenment for the day ..

[Fran Marie]

Lol
. Not a problem.. some forms are quite difficult to understsnd.. thanks agsin my friend.😁

[Indra Neil]

superb composition and fantastic imagery! well done! :)

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so much dear friend,so appreciated..

[Indra Neil]

u r most welcome! :)

[Swetha]

A work of art...signifies the immortality of nature. Beautiful.

[Nath]

Truly a beautiful poem about autumn, it captures the feeling that November's starkness evokes, when the sky cries rain and the wind strips the trees.
To me it conveys a feeling of forlornness, as November takes all signs of summer's life, that contrasts with the liveliness of the dancing wind.
The descriptions are stunning and overall it is an awesome poem.
I also like the rhyme scheme and the flow of it.
You did an amazing job here!

[EmpressPoetess]

I agree with all the other comments: superb writing and I love this new form you've introduced here! I must try it. Thanks for sharing your wonderful skills with us!

Dee

[emmajoy]

What a complicated procedure, had to read it three times to understand .. stupid Brit!

Brilliant work, seems no matter what you do, you do it superbly. You've done the business re. the form, and created a series of masterpieces, stanza by stanza!

' A Smiling Sun disappears ~ to a distant dark expanse ~ gray sky,sighs,and reappears ~ as November's winds still dance ' - beautiful.

[Angel Bird]

Beauty in words - you are such a skilled poet. Stunning images of Autumn in November you created.
Truly enchanting.

[Desert Dreamer]

"Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn"
These first lines are my favorite and I am still enjoying this image of the wind dancing and disrobing the trees. Thanks for the introduction to this new rhyming scheme.

[babyblue]

nice descrption of the changings of times in november.

[Sean M. Addams]

very nicely done .. i thought this was a very beautiful and impressive piece... imagery was great and format was unique ..overall a very brillant write from u... nice job on this!!!

[Honeypot]

I am thoroughly impressed! I haven't heard of this form before, but you seem to have done and excellent job. The poem is stunning! Its almost like a strip tease the way the way you word the disrobing of the trees. Beautiful job on this.