Winds of November

Winds of November

A Poem by Fran Marie

Ae Feislighe Form


Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn
Leaf limb's,bare bough surrender
succumb to Nature's bottom

Crying Rains,sweep demanding
November's heavy downpours
Fall reigns,its fate, commanding
appearing dead,yet, endures

A Sleeping Moon regresses
undying in cold starkness
November's sky~depresses
rendering life to darkness

Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays

A Smiling Sun disappears
to a distant dark expanse
gray sky,sighs,and reappears
as November's winds still dance

© 2009 Fran Marie

Author's Note

  Fran Marie
Ae Freislighe

Each line of the Ae Freislighe has seven syllables, with lines
one and three ending in triple rhymes and two and four with
double rhymes. The poem must also end as it began, either with
the first syllable, word, phrase, or line.

The Ae Freislighe is a quatrain stanza with a fixed rhyme scheme


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well that's November no doubt ..i use to live in SD and sunny skies are rare in the summer, let alone in the fall..and those winds never stop blowing ..just change direction .. had to read several times to "get into" the rhythm of this rhyming ...i do not understand how the form fits ...with the double and triple rhyming??? so kept looking for that ..once i gave up and just read it i was able to enjoy the painting .. i think the alliterations are spaced nicely and balanced ..Irish poetry is filled with them eh!? Fall is one of my favorite seasons and here in the Ozarks the skies are not so bleak and the threats of winter not nearly so demanding ... the poem rather dark for glorious fall ...a creative and unique approach ... difficult form with syntax always a challenge ...almost precludes sticking to it ;) beautiful imagery as November disrobes the trees ..not sure what her "bottom" is .. i took it as bottoming out ..?
i think your first and last verses are the strong ones in this ..did you have to work and re-work many times? ;)

Posted 5 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

5 Years Ago

Thanks E. So much for reading..the triple rhyming are in lines one and three ending words in those .. read more
Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

ahhhh syllables .. as if getting things down is not hard enough eh!? i was thinking rhyme ..where o .. read more
  Fran Marie

5 Years Ago

. Not a problem.. some forms are quite difficult to understsnd.. thanks agsin my friend.�.. read more


superb composition and fantastic imagery! well done! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago

  Fran Marie

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much dear friend,so appreciated..
Indra Neil

7 Years Ago

u r most welcome! :)
A work of art...signifies the immortality of nature. Beautiful.

Posted 8 Years Ago

Truly a beautiful poem about autumn, it captures the feeling that November's starkness evokes, when the sky cries rain and the wind strips the trees.
To me it conveys a feeling of forlornness, as November takes all signs of summer's life, that contrasts with the liveliness of the dancing wind.
The descriptions are stunning and overall it is an awesome poem.
I also like the rhyme scheme and the flow of it.
You did an amazing job here!

Posted 11 Years Ago

I agree with all the other comments: superb writing and I love this new form you've introduced here! I must try it. Thanks for sharing your wonderful skills with us!


Posted 12 Years Ago

What a complicated procedure, had to read it three times to understand .. stupid Brit!

Brilliant work, seems no matter what you do, you do it superbly. You've done the business re. the form, and created a series of masterpieces, stanza by stanza!

' A Smiling Sun disappears ~ to a distant dark expanse ~ gray sky,sighs,and reappears ~ as November's winds still dance ' - beautiful.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Beauty in words - you are such a skilled poet. Stunning images of Autumn in November you created.
Truly enchanting.

Posted 12 Years Ago

"Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn"
These first lines are my favorite and I am still enjoying this image of the wind dancing and disrobing the trees. Thanks for the introduction to this new rhyming scheme.

Posted 12 Years Ago

nice descrption of the changings of times in november.

Posted 13 Years Ago

very nicely done .. i thought this was a very beautiful and impressive piece... imagery was great and format was unique ..overall a very brillant write from u... nice job on this!!!

Posted 13 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I am thoroughly impressed! I haven't heard of this form before, but you seem to have done and excellent job. The poem is stunning! Its almost like a strip tease the way the way you word the disrobing of the trees. Beautiful job on this.

Posted 13 Years Ago

2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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Added on February 19, 2008
Last Updated on November 1, 2009


  Fran Marie
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