Still Clouded

Still Clouded

A Poem by Fran Marie
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Sonnet

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Still clouded, my mem'ries as in a spell
I left 'moving towards what' lurks in shadows
knowing, naught, what ominous signs fortell
rain fell unpleasing thru~ weeping willows
yet compelled, i ventured forth into night
dark spirits fastened locks 'pon soul and breath
mysterious beams of mist shone grey light
like dull light on a stone  haloed in death
Icy chills moved upon my ashen skin
still no words could i utter from blue lips
a sleepwalk of suffocation,within
waking to fear with iced-blood fingertips
 
A dream so real, 'moving towards what' may be?
still clouded, death's light on a stone' for me

© 2009 Fran Marie


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oh.. I LOVE sonnets and i absolutely love this one. the darling sentiments carefully placed. A most perfect and befitting couplet!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

6 Years Ago

Thanks Moonskittles, so very mch appriciate your reading and review of my poetry..
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Hi Fran. Congratulations!!! I hadn't read this one but a very worthy entry, and well deserves its third placing, alf

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

6 Years Ago

Thanks Alf, so vey much appriciate the review...
read it twice just for pleasure..its so brilliantly written ! The poem flowed in my mind like a movie..the imagery is vivid and very descriptive..kudos !

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

chilling and haunting and very vivid. The flow of a sonnet went really well with this theme... and I like the rhyme a lot. A really intense write. Thanks for all your submissions to my contest. :]

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is beautifully but haunting to love the imagery in this alot.... i really liked this ... a very amazing write!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Another great poem and well deserving of your Third Place Win. I always look forward to reading the poems you submit. Great work

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Great rhyme, nice and short, great visual

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

This was chilling
You painted a clear picture here of your vivid dream
I wanted to reach out and help you
Yet your words so soft it almost had a fairytale feel to it
Well penned as always
Ray


Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Absolutely beautiful. Your capture the terror of a nightmare in a way that's almost alluring. Wonderful work!

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

You are so talented. I can never do a sonnet, let alone one so lovely. Such an enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing this with us.

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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  Fran Marie
Fran Marie

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