Ice

Ice

A Poem by Fran Marie
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Ya Du form

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oh winter nights
casting lights dim
chill bites the air
blinding glare snows
rage there as bitter wind blows

tall pine trees bow
upright; now bent
down boughs, with ice
on un-nice ground
harsh slice of winter profound

soon spring shall come
when you're done~and
you've run your course
no remorse lent
your coarse, farewell winter spent

© 2021 Fran Marie


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the polar vortex has hit and spins a brutal cold ..in 1905 NE Arkansas recorded the all time low temp of -29 degrees. My thermometer yesterday was 8 degrees in the wee hours and didn't raise to more that 12. Its very unusual for the area to be so cold. Yesterday evening we even had snow accumulating to about 2" and is still here this morning. I always think of Winter as a time of sleep .. a time of "man in the lodge" .. the quiet slumber of promise and new life ... but this is killer .. a friend in SD told me it was -40 with the wind chill ... my favorite line in your poem is "on un-nice ground" .. i love the license you take with the language there ;) vivid description ... I can see how jacob takes it as the pandemic .. also brutal and wearying for all :(
E.
ps. i never heard of the Ya-du form! what a demanding form it is ... the rhyme scheme spins me nog just reading what it is .. brave soul, Fran, for rising to the challenge

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

i bet it did ... i did a pantoum for a class and it was a rewriting nightmare ... ;) .. read more
  Fran Marie

2 Months Ago

Ahh yes the Pentium; i done those also another confusing form
Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

i think so too ... but rewarding in the end i think. :)



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I truly do hate cold. But here on the central California coast, my idea of "cold" would be laughable to the people who felt the polar vortex this winter! Still, wimp or not, your poem makes me feel the vicious bite of ice & cold & snow in such a hurtful dynamic way. Yet, you finish with a springtime truce, as if to say, lots of benevolent forces bite us in the a*s, but life always gets sunny again (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


  Fran Marie

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks Margie
we finally have
some spring days
this past week
in kentuck.. read more
dearest Fran... this Winter chills my body like
Champagne on Ice.... intoxicating poetry to unfold in the tendrils of my mind. “Farewell Winter spent”... We now have a Hint of Spring and a light breeze in March. tenderly, Pat

Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

Awhh yes..spring
is in the air for
sure

thanks dear Pat
I always.. read more
What a nice poem with a new style, I never heard before this... Really nice with good rhyming to describe a season...

Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

Thanks Sima
glad you liked
this one; the form
is a bit tricky took
me a.. read more
Terrific take on winter. I wish you were in WE PAW Bloggers on Facebook so you could be included in the next group ezine issue -- it's a spoken word poetry prompt for poems on the theme of winter.

Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

Thanks mom for reading
I appreciate your comments;

The we paw bloggers?
.. read more
MomzillaNC

1 Month Ago

Great. If you want to be part of that prompt, the deadline is tomorrow by noonish, my time (Eastern .. read more
Hey Fran! :-)
Such Beautiful write, I love your work!!!

I have never heard about the Ya-du form before...And you have written so cleverly!

Amazing and well done from me !!!
Hugs
Sil

Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

Thanks All
so.much appreciate
your kind words on
my poem;
Very nice Fran Marie. First off your words paint a fine picture of this wintry scene. Then I haven't seen this form of poem before. It took me a little time to figure out the rhyming scheme which you have pulled off very cleverly.
Hope you are well. Isn't it great to have left winter behind.
All the best.
Alan

Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

Thanks Allen
for your kind
review and yes
s o looking forward
for spring.. read more
When cold goes away it's always a good day. At least, to me it is.

Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

Thanks Tim
I hear ya..
I'm s o ready
for spring to
arrive;
I am definitely ready to winter to disembark and for spring to saunter in. Love the imagery of the trees and ice painted in this poem

Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

Me too I'm
s o ready
to say goodbye
to winter
Thanks Kristina
.. read more
Poetic Beauty

1 Month Ago

You are welcome
What an unusual form. Never heard of it before Fran. Studied your poem to ascertain when and where the rhyme falls. Doesn't look easy. I would imagine this poem took time to compose. I know the winter weather has been severe on your side of the pond, with much dumping of snow. It has been bitterly cold here, but so far only one day of snow which melted quickly. You appear to be in the grip of cold at the moment. Never fear, spring is just round the corner. I am keeping my fingers crossed :)


Chris

Posted 2 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

2 Months Ago

Thanks Chris
yes, it did take
time to write
this one, some
form poems.. read more
Apparently much of the US is experiencing conditions much like the images described in this offering. I would say this makes me glad to be a grit, but the south is getting it as bad as the rest.

Posted 2 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

2 Months Ago

Thanks John
a lot of people
are without power
especially Texas
during th.. read more

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