Smoke

Senryu

           kissed on the forehead

     saying you care when you don't

           still blowing your smoke

Reviews

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Ah, I loved this! The concept and idea are just so perfect, the rhymes are perfectly spot-on and you can see the intentions, everything behind the words, it's so strong. And I love the potential metaphor behind the smoke, maybe something akin to smoke and mirrors. Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Colacat for reading
and your kind review.i s o appreciate;

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

It's funny how a simple kiss could mean different things. But actions still speak loudest of all. Nice write.

[Fran Marie]

thanks Cyprian so very much
yes: guess it depends on whom
the kiss is from

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we can tell whether that kiss is telling the truth or not.
powerful senryu here, Fran.
j.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Jacob
So very much
appreciate your kind review

[Coyote Poetry]

Those people who blow smoke, we need them. They can make us smile dear Fran. You said a handful in so few words. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Fran Marie]

Thanks John so
very much for reading
and your kind review:)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Fran.

[Poetic Beauty]

Those to pretend to love when they don’t don’t are the worst. Be honest brutally honest. I’d rather that than flowery lies this smell of fragrant trash. This sparked so many thought and feelings within me in only three lines.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks PB
for your thoughts on this
one. I do appreciate

[Chris Shaw]

This senryu makes me think of someone hedging his bets. Basically he hasn't got the guts to tell it as it is. So the kiss missed the lips and landed on the forehead. Plenty of smoke used here. Well done Fran Marie. Your senryu speaks volumes.

Chris

[Fran Marie]

Thanks dear Chris;
So much appreciate
your keen review..