Stoned Cold Laurels

powdered~ puff dragon
his laurel leaf crown slipped
magic~
over eyes that have wept
and whose mind has slept...kept
          from truth..  grieved.
in his naive youth  deceived
            by one sweet rose..
green laurel leaves withered
            and can weep no more

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Romeo, Romeo, wherefore art thou, Romeo? Deny thy father and refuse thy name...what's in a name? A rose by any other name would smell just as sweet...
wept, slept kept from the truth.
Our young generation may just wake up one day to see the world around them is in permanent sleep...
and they will wonder what happened.
damn, this is such a significant write...I feel it is one of my favorites from you Fran.
If I rated I would give this 110!

[Fran Marie]

thanks Jacob for your in-depth and insightful review ..i wouldn't want to
be a youth in today's society ..this
topsy- turvy world ..glad to be old lol
much appreciate you reviewing🌷

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow. What a romantic poem. You really described the dark side of love perfectly.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Dale
much appreciate the kind review

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Pat yes a touch of P P & Mary
love their songs from back in the day
I appreciate your lovely review...
Aloha🌷

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Fran… reminds me of “Puff the Magic Dragon lived by the Sea.. he frolicked in the Noon day Sun in a Land called Honalea. Dragons live forever.. not so little boys… and so the story goes. Gently, Pat

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Pat for the kind review
Love P P & Mary songs
from back in the day..
frocliking away in youth
much appreciated

[Temperance]

..over eyes that have wept and whose mind has slept...kept from truth...grieved. in his naive youth deceived by one sweet rose... I love these lines! Is is sad to say that it appears to be so much easier for people to not tell the truth these days. That is in every situation; relationships, business, between friends, etc. When discovered, the lie will hurt worse than the truth. ...and can weep no more. Being deceived can do that. Nice work, Fran! Thank you for sharing! Temp

[Betty Hermelee]

A sensual poem with deep meanings of love, truths that have been kept secret. Now the rose is withered as is he.... neither can weep no more... the photo is so perfect to sway with your words...there is something very mystetious about it... love once there has faded away.
Excellent write Fran!
Truly
B.

[Fran Marie]

Sorry to be so late
with my thank you
I do appreciate yoyr kind
review..

[Betty Hermelee]

No worries and you’re very welcome!
Best, B.

[Ranger Kessel]

A brief poem with every word carrying significant meaning. Thank you for posting.

[Fran Marie]

Thank you Ranger😊
s o much appreciated

[Chris Shaw]

Really taken by the layout of your chosen words and the placing of the rhyme here Fran. Then I read Jacob's knock out review. Pleased I visited to read you both. Have a lovely Thursday.

Chris

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Chris🌷 for stopping
by ..i so appreciate the review

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Betty so very much
appreciate your kind review🌷