Midnight Sky~Villanelle

Villanelle Form

 

 

 

Dwelling in sacred thoughts was I

my senses tuned to harmony

Gazing up at the midnight sky

 

A thousand bare stars caught my eye

enchantment reached inside of me

Dwelling in sacred thoughts was I

 

Charmed by a glow,I can't deny

reaping a sweet serenity

Gazing up at the midnight sky

 

Absorbed in moon's dark halo high

my gladdened heart beats blissful glee

Dwelling in sacred thoughts was I

 

As wonders of what,where and why

were revealed so suddenly

Gazing up at the midnight sky

 

Answers on which I can rely

 life's mystery of destiny

Dwelling in sacred thoughts was I

Gazing up at the midnight sky

 

 

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Dear Fran Marie!
Magnetic imagery, alone, renders this marvelous Villanelle a virtual masterpiece of poetical enthrallment … deep and vibrant into my heart's wonder, the senses are filled to the brink by your softly engaging moments beneath the moon's and stars' embrace.
The picture brought to mind "Gothic" — yet, this piece is anything but, and I ached to be there with you, in the night (as you described it) had such a deep, alluring pull on my spirit … excellent poetry often effects me like this.
Brilliantly composed, Fran, you've dazzled with spot-on rhyme, captivating word choices and arrangement, following precisely and faithfully the rules for this amazing form, with but a couple of flow issues in V1L2 and V5L2 where count was lost. V4L2, consider "gladdened".
The depth and originality of your imagination are beguiling, to say the least, and your skills are such to make the boldest poet enviable.

Do I like it? Hah! No, I love it!
Thank you, Lovely Poetess, for sharing You with Us! ⁓ Richard

[Fran Marie]

thanks so much Richard, for reading, and yes, I see what you mean on some count errors .. I will fix that up, I appreciate your review on my poetry and pointers on problem areas...

[Richard🖌]

Thanks, Fran,
How about all the rest I so ernestly and sincerely offered? : )

[Fran Marie]

I love all your comments indeed, always appreciate such sincere and kind words;

[Richard🖌]

Aw, blush!

[A.J. Smith]

Very nice, Fran! This is my second Villanelle read today...and I only just learned of it. Quite a challenge and you cratfed a lovely piece within its tight confines. Great poem, as always!

[Brianna Brie]

Oh yeah, this does justice to the starry sky last night that I stared at with wonderment. It wanted to inspire me, but unfortunately the words were not there. Well done!

[luthien7]

BEAUTIFUL imagery. Really loved reading this. Excellent job - lovely villanelle.

[Valorie J. Shearer]

Very nice, beautifully written! Take care~~~

[Suelou]

Fran, although I have only written one villanelle, I love the villanelles. You wrote this beautifully.

[Rainbowco]

Perfection in form and content. This is how it should be done.

[Mr. Lopez]

This is a beauty. Every single word was so skillfully placed and were meant to sit beside eachother but never knew it until you told them to stand in this order. Beyond explanation. just truly beautiful.

[MandarinOranges]

Awesome!!

That's all I can say

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I like the mystical chant running through the poem, very nice verse.