Darkness Becomes You

Darkness becomes you
you write the script of the night
moving in phantom shadows
  possessing evils so profound
 
 
Darkness surrounds you
in contrast to a full moon's bright light
 your presence dictates the wicked winds that blow
the theft of blood stolen with your symbolical bite
 
 
Darkness spawns you
shaping your sullen soul
forming dreadful secrets you alone own
pumping fear into victims on sight
 
 
Darkness sates you
as you breathe its change of dank air
sucking its heart to your raw delight
a familiar madness you've always known
 
 
Darkness soothes you
executing your passionate flight
your every vampyre desire
is in broad view
 
Darkness becomes you, 
for you are one with the night
 

Reviews

[Ancient My Enemy]

Fran Marie,

Nicely done. I like the repetitive first lines and how you use a different verb in each, until coming full circle by ending with the same line you started with. The last stanza is also a wonderful summation. It rounds out the poem beautifully. Nicely done. Thank you for writing it.

CW

[Daughter of Darkness]

This poem was very, very good. Wonderfully written.
Oh, great job on this piece winning the `Darkness` contes!

[Cassandra D.]

This was an interesting poem.
I really did enjoy reading this one.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was a little scary! lol nice vampire piece.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your great winning poem!

[Tina Kline]

What a dark and exciting vampire poem. I enjoyed reading it
very much. I like the way it seemed to build up
to the end.

[deeps]

This is so wonderful, I really enjoyed this write.
Passionate and well written.

[Dusk's Dream. Dawn's Ho..]

This seems like a dark and sexy twist to Vampire romance. Once again I have to decline this piece of writing from the Vampyres:)(: contest due to the condition in the description about the contest being for stories and books.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

You make the dark seem so sexy and passionate... really a fabulous write.

[Sean M. Addams]

I really enjoyed this piece such a dark and deep feel to it.... I think the picture you adding really gave it more depth.... overall a very good read dripping red with great imagery!!!!