Claustrophobia

for a writing promt

 

 

I can feel the darkness swallow me whole

The air in the room getting thinner

I have to get out of here

Before it’s too late

 

I hear the door slam

I hear the lock click

I begin to panic

To beg for help

 

Try to claw my way out

Try to cry out

I know it’s not use

I’m going to die here

 

I feel my heart pound

I hear my brain race

I begin to breath heavy

This is the end

 

Suddenly a light shines through

A darken figure in the doorway

I begin to laugh

I’m saved.

Reviews

[Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram]

I feel my heart pound
I hear my brain race
I begin to breath heavy
This is the end
...........................................................writing with suitable words.

for the life there is not end.
for the beginning only there will be an end.
for the colorful life there will be a turning point.

OK.............I like your writing. with wishes.

[Krystyna Herst]

Claustrophobia is a pain is the a*s. Nice write :)

[Archia]

I enjoyed how the tension built up until 'this is the end' where it was at its height. But then it changed round and it was all good. Nice poem

[MandaBear]

wow this is awesome. can certainly feel your heart pound. good job

[Wendy Seames Garner]

Glad I'm not claustrophobic!

[ATG]

I think that would be a claustrophobes worst nightmare. This poem was very well written and the imagery was great. Overall, a very good piece.