Earth …in seventeen syllables

Earth …in seventeen syllables

A Poem by Freedom Jurnee
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Haiku from my blog http://haikubyjoy.wordpress.com/

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You rain and I cry,

Your wind is the air I breathe.

Please don’t hold your breath.

© 2012 Freedom Jurnee


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Thanks Courage! That is exactly what I was going for.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Wow i really like this one. Especially how you describe earth as the wind you breathe. The last line was so touching how you couldn't live without the earth. I couldn't help, but think this earth was a person you personified it very well. Good job.
-Courage

Posted 8 Years Ago


Thank you again! I have to try haiku's out of the seventeen syllable context...that is a good idea.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Again! I had to chuckle at the simple beauty expressed here. Being easy to read and understand it fits my simple brain just perfectly.

PS....You can use more than seventeen syllables, if you want to.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Freedom Jurnee
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My name is Freedom Jurnee. I am a family woman first. A wife (with a wonderful husband), A mother (with the best children in the world). I am a writer for several blogs, an author of great works you h.. more..

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