Golf.

Golf.

A Poem by Marie

Iron touches ball,

speeding through the air to land

down a flagged hole!



 


© 2024 Marie


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I think it could had been clearer.

Iron touched the ball
speeding through air till it lands
down the flagged hole!

Also I may had not mastered this technique yet....
And haiku generally have some kind of realization

https://www.writebetterpoems.com/articles/how-to-write-haiku

"The most important of these other rules is that the haiku conveys a single moment where the poet suddenly sees or realizes something.

In this way of thinking, the haiku is a lightning bolt—fast, clear, and striking, it shows a whole panorama of thought in a single flash. "

I am not sure though....

Peace....
Signing off



Posted 4 Weeks Ago


Are you sure this is about golf? Describes many other things to me as well. Excellent.
Especially that last line.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Marie

4 Weeks Ago

I didn't actually, Ken. The Senryu was penned with only golf in mind, as I have stated in my rfeply .. read more
Ken Simm.

4 Weeks Ago

My bad. I can only claim to not be all there today.
Marie

4 Weeks Ago

HHHHmmmm... NO worries, Ken. We all have one of those days from time to time...
A hole in one with this one. As a metaphor for every action there is a reaction but not always as favorable. As a child played with a stick and a rock as an adult never played. A great Haiku

Posted 1 Month Ago


Marie

1 Month Ago

I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment so kindly, Soren. Thank you, dear friend...

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Added on November 2, 2024
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Kerry, Ireland



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