DREAM STATE

DREAM STATE

A Poem by GBU POETRY ONLY
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Free to be yourself.... get with it!!

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This is not a police state  ...   

       IT'S A DREAM STATE

Free to imagine

Free to unleash

Free to become yourself


This is not a dictator's plate ...

       IT'S A DREAM CAKE

Free to choose

Free to live

Free to be yourself


This is not a perfect slate ...

       IT'S A DREAMSCAPE

Free to make mistakes

Free to up the stakes

Free to be yourself


This is not a closed debate ...

       IT'S A DREAM SWINGING GATE

Free to shout

Free to be open

Free to be yourself

       A N D      D R E A M ....

© 2009 GBU POETRY ONLY


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This is beautiful. I was having a deep, dark, introverted night, and you reminded me why I write. The things that we have are what make us beautiful and what open the world to our adventures. You have reminded me that we have space to be ourselves and find joy in who we are, inside. You've reminded me to remember how to dream, and that I am capable of doing just that. Thank you.
I really like how you've made a startling contradiction at the beginning of each stanza before expanding to explain why these contradictions are important.
Well structured, well written, and your flow is exceptional. Nice work!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I was looking through a few of your pieces, and this one is (so far) the one I enjoy the most.
THe only word that I can find that truly describes it is 'beautiful' because that is truly what it is. It reminds me of exactly why I stay up until four in the morning to write, because of the sense of freedom I get. This was a marvelous, beautiful, tasty piece, that I felt incredibly attached to. It described so much about the feeling, not one part of it was lacking.
A great write!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

One word review: Limitless

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A real optimistic view with freedom's chant heard loud and clear. Nice write.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That was a very awsome writing. I relate to your words thank you for sharing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is beautiful. I was having a deep, dark, introverted night, and you reminded me why I write. The things that we have are what make us beautiful and what open the world to our adventures. You have reminded me that we have space to be ourselves and find joy in who we are, inside. You've reminded me to remember how to dream, and that I am capable of doing just that. Thank you.
I really like how you've made a startling contradiction at the beginning of each stanza before expanding to explain why these contradictions are important.
Well structured, well written, and your flow is exceptional. Nice work!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i love the third part, this is not a perfect slate, free to make mistakes...
that's so true, i agree completely!
i really like this!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This to me just screams optimist. I Love it. No matter what secular opression people put down. You can always dream. Beautiful piece.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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