White knight

White knight

A Poem by GDmonster

Oh white knight 
How you shine in the day light 
In the murky waters you don’t show 
Your reflection dose not glow 
But still in your soul light lives on 
As you stand next to the burned down oak 
You began to choke 
On the darkness that surrounds you 

© 2012 GDmonster


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 GDmonster
goes with this http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/GDMonster/962476/

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Very clever, interweaving the two poems in a manner that lets them stand on their own as well. ^_^

Posted 6 Years Ago


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 GDmonster

6 Years Ago

Thanks my.friend!
Eric Wyatt

6 Years Ago

Any time!
Awsome. The two poems are interlocked that is amazing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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HAHA! I just came from the other poem! Wicked! ^-^ This one was great too :D Love it. ONWARDS!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Love it, another amazing piece :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


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I would love to see you put white knight and dark knight and put into light that nothing is ever purely good or purely bad. Nice work.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cool, i love the last line the best

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is interesting..... Good work, I would like more added to this!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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A.G
you're unique title pulled me in, and after reading your poem I see it fits well. excellent use of imagery and rhyming

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

you have really got a very imaginative mind..this poem is really nice ....

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Very cool imagery, the only thing I would say is to change "dose" to "does".

Posted 7 Years Ago


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 GDmonster

7 Years Ago

thanks and could you read dark knight too? kinda goes with this

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