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You got to move on

You got to move on

A Poem by GDmonster

A stab to the heart

One strike multiple blows

Sorrow in her eyes

The tears reflecting her soul’s most inner thoughts

Dwelling on the past, not able to look onward

But time won’t halt so easily

Hang on to those fragments of there heart

Do what they would want you to do

Live

© 2013 GDmonster


Author's Note

 GDmonster
Now this is not that great sory, i prob need to edit it more, alot of my poems start out like this

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That's right. Live. Live long and free. If you let the past hold you down how on earth will you enjoy the future? This is a really sorrowful piece, my friend! Wonderful message though that despite the past you still need to learn, take hold of the fragments of your tattered past, and move forward. Don't let it chain you but take wisdom from it to live a life much better then the past!

I really enjoyed this, Keep up the good work!

~Rebirth!~

Posted 5 Years Ago


Umm hate to be the critic, but that third last line, did you mean those fragments of "the" heart?
Otherwise, I like it. sorry im picky.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Timeless-Chan

5 Years Ago

Could have meant 'their'... that one would make sense also!
Great poem. Its short and sweet to the point and has a great meaning

Posted 5 Years Ago


This is a great short poem. I like it's meaningfulness.

Posted 6 Years Ago


So sad and heartbreaking. I could feel.the characters pain.excellent work .

Posted 6 Years Ago


 Soul Fire

6 Years Ago

it really shows you thebittersweetenessin moving on
Absolutely lovely. Moving on can be hard. But you only have one life. Live it :)

100/100

Posted 6 Years Ago


Meaningful poem, you've arranged a nice flow of emotions here :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


The whole things is great!

Posted 6 Years Ago


The ending was great! It was a nice touch! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


"Hang on to those fragments of there heart
Do what they would want you to do
Live"
I like the ending. Many lessons in a life. We will fall down. We must get up. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote


Posted 6 Years Ago



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