What has yet to come

What has yet to come

A Poem by GDmonster
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This dose not ryme at all but each line dose gose together in telling whats going on here.

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Broken glass imbedded in my feet

Thorns around my ankles

Castle gleaming in the moon light  

Night air chilled with fright

Engulfed in darkness

Unsure of the fate ahead

Growls of the unfair

Falling to the ground

Wishing you were there

© 2012 GDmonster


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Wow! That was beautiful, nice vocabulary and the emotion, the fear, was really shown and the imagery was awesome!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very pretty lines for such a short poem! The only thing I saw that you should change is that you put "Castle gleaming in moon light" and I think it should be "Castle gleaming in the moonlight". Other than that, the imagery was great!

Posted 8 Years Ago


 GDmonster

8 Years Ago

fixed it!!!!!!
Woah! love the imagery with it!!! Good job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amazing. I'm not sleeping tonight

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

For something so short it sure has impact and I agree with Monica, the first line sucked me in :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the first line captured my attention right away! I love the imagery you create here, it's a good peice of writing (:

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow i love this i think its well worded together just wow :O

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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