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Dream Scheme (Pt. III)

Dream Scheme (Pt. III)

A Poem by G.W. Saitreux
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surrealism

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Shall we never learn?
Shall we never yearn?

I saw an object once
Again knew trumpets
Shattering windows
Could it remain in my brain?

Stop the thoughts, start doing
Up before the bells, get moving
Could it be hell there?
Could it be heaven here?

I chase the vision
Down corridors of sky
Imprint like sandpaper, 
What might it mean to die?

A kiss floats around like daydreams
Crisp, pale nights flowing seams
Of warm breezes upon the nape of
A neck moulded, dysphoria exploring
Chasms of roaring abyss frequenting
A location of eternal searching themes

Looking through the window
Pains of a soul racing
Cells caught dividing
Not quite half,
Not quite whole,
Digging holes in the soul
We've all got things to sell
The broken sails look upon attention or content?

Purgatory

Fate constantly collides upon the present
Peered through that window torn in two
Seen where those trails lead
Could it be already dead?

- G.W. Saitreux

© 2018 G.W. Saitreux


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A quite mystifying poem here. It has the sound of some profound inner experience, perhaps a religious vision, perhaps a psychotic break.

Posted 2 Years Ago


What might it mean to die?

(Could it be hell there?
Could it be heaven here?)

*struggles to put feelings into words*
This is incredible. I'll have to start with that. I'm pretty much speechless at the moment and words are escaping me. I've never heard anyone ever say what you had - where I wrote it above - and it is like taking a hundred conversations I failed to convey what I was trying to say and you put in essentially three sentences/lines.

I love (x3) how you expressed how where we are now could be what most people dream of heaven to be after death and that what if it were the other way around. What if this were heaven and the next life, in a place after death, is hell. It's why I don't think about it. Atheism is a necessity in philosophy like this but still very good to keep in mind.

And what does it mean to die? A thought many don't truly take into consideration or those that do take it to a whole other level of obsession. Still, you managed to express it in such a unique and original way with several other topics of interest included. Definitely, my favorite part of the Dream Scheme so far and thoroughly enjoyed reading this.

Posted 2 Years Ago


...........This - is - powerful.....and profound! wow! quite enjoyed the progression of this, the world painted throughout the adventure.....the deep questions asked - Well done! Simply sublime!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yes fates collided upon the present- looking through the window it’s the truth we see and the rest are living a illusion- never is what it seemed and always seems to be much more- love your words- great thoughts- 🌹

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very nice use of words.
Cells caught dividing
"Not quite half,
Not quite whole,
Digging holes in the soul
We've all got things to sell
The broken sails look upon attention or content?
Purgatory"
I love the above lines. A place I knew. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Added on April 19, 2018
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