A rush over my head

A rush over my head

A Poem by Gabby The GAB

There's a place I wanna go
A place you surely know
Said love over my head
Honestly is what i want until im dead 

With you in my mind but you left me behind, I know that you want it too
I see it in your eyes but you always wanna lie, I guess it wasn't true
Nobody would have noticed it
But loving you is all i want

I cant play like the way that you did
I cant move like the way that you do
But I can stay and love you
I hope it's the same for you too

There's a life that I wanna live
Live like we mean it
Live with you with every piece of it
Oh, I’m always gonna let you choose

You're just so good at letting go
I choke on my words like a fool with no clue
My mind is stuck with the memories too
I'm stuck now thinking about you

© 2020 Gabby The GAB


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The narrator of your poem doesn't represent himself in a very smooth or polished way, it's more like he's a bumbling fool in love. I get the feeling this might've been intended as an earnest love poem, not a spoof, but in a way this guy presents as being so clumsy at love, it seems like you're almost laughing at him between the lines. Also, this guy has a big inferiority complex & he sees this other person/woman as being "above" him. All this is a bad recipe for love, in my opinion, but this is how most guys come across. They are afraid to approach a woman, feeling inferior, which makes him act in clueless dumb ways, instead of presenting himself with panache & polish. In short, a very realistic poem where you SHOW instead of tell how clumsy a guy can feel. Here's hoping your Easter weekend is a good one (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gabby The GAB

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the Revieww Margiee!!! ur reviews are always making me think things, I'm learning so m.. read more



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This is so wonderful and well expressed... enjoyed

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gabby The GAB

1 Year Ago

Thankss :))
The narrator of your poem doesn't represent himself in a very smooth or polished way, it's more like he's a bumbling fool in love. I get the feeling this might've been intended as an earnest love poem, not a spoof, but in a way this guy presents as being so clumsy at love, it seems like you're almost laughing at him between the lines. Also, this guy has a big inferiority complex & he sees this other person/woman as being "above" him. All this is a bad recipe for love, in my opinion, but this is how most guys come across. They are afraid to approach a woman, feeling inferior, which makes him act in clueless dumb ways, instead of presenting himself with panache & polish. In short, a very realistic poem where you SHOW instead of tell how clumsy a guy can feel. Here's hoping your Easter weekend is a good one (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gabby The GAB

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the Revieww Margiee!!! ur reviews are always making me think things, I'm learning so m.. read more

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Added on April 11, 2020
Last Updated on June 14, 2020
Tags: Sad, Love, Life, Poem, Poetry

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