A rush over my head

There's a place I wanna go

A place you surely know

Said love over my head

Honestly is what i want until im dead 

With you in my mind but you left me behind, I know that you want it too

I see it in your eyes but you always wanna lie, I guess it wasn't true

Nobody would have noticed it

But loving you is all i want

I cant play like the way that you did

I cant move like the way that you do

But I can stay and love you

I hope it's the same for you too

There's a life that I wanna live

Live like we mean it

Live with you with every piece of it

Oh, I’m always gonna let you choose

You're just so good at letting go

I choke on my words like a fool with no clue

My mind is stuck with the memories too

I'm stuck now thinking about you

Reviews

[TheGayAgenda]

I love the story and how it portrays the character as believing that something is still possible and if not, they still want to be friends,I absolutely think that this is one of the best poems I've ever read, I'm more of a story writer but you manage to tell a story of one million words in only a few. thank you.

[Gabby The GAB]

Very inspiring, I appreciate you for regarding my poem as one of those poems.
Thank you so much for the sweet review! :))

[MissRedDr3amer]

"You're just so good at letting go" and then you're left with just memories. I really liked this line. It has a strong, meaningful impact for such a short, simple line.
You capture a feeling so many of us are familiar with (unfortunately). Beautiful work!

[Emily Rose]

This. I love this. I could see this being written into a song - heartbreaking but beautifully written. Well done!

[Matthew Kult]

A sense of love and sadness. Desperately wanting but scared to be left behind. Lovely write.

Good read.

With love,

Matthew

[Rats]

wow this is really good I absolutaly love it

[Unspoken poet]

This is so wonderful and well expressed... enjoyed

[Gabby The GAB]

Thankss :))

[barleygirl]

The narrator of your poem doesn't represent himself in a very smooth or polished way, it's more like he's a bumbling fool in love. I get the feeling this might've been intended as an earnest love poem, not a spoof, but in a way this guy presents as being so clumsy at love, it seems like you're almost laughing at him between the lines. Also, this guy has a big inferiority complex & he sees this other person/woman as being "above" him. All this is a bad recipe for love, in my opinion, but this is how most guys come across. They are afraid to approach a woman, feeling inferior, which makes him act in clueless dumb ways, instead of presenting himself with panache & polish. In short, a very realistic poem where you SHOW instead of tell how clumsy a guy can feel. Here's hoping your Easter weekend is a good one (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Gabby The GAB]

Thank you for the Revieww Margiee!!! ur reviews are always making me think things, I'm learning so much from it. Thanks! :))