Without Me

A Lyrical Poem

Dear Wayward One,

Leaving me was such a painful thing you had done!

Immense aching of an empty room in my heart

Within, nothing to fill it in but you, you depart.

I'm sorry to see you go, but I guess you're happy without me.

I'm happy for you, but engulfed in my tears, how could you leave?

Every day, my life keeps missing you and I keep missing you.

Please, return to sender and stay for good and stay true.

Yet you are still happy without me and no apology

Could bring you back in all honesty.

Friend, yes, I call you that still.

There sits a heart of mine that stings.

You became the puzzle and the piece that broke away

And me, left behind with the rest and still here to stay.

Without me, you say you are happy and I'm happy

Yet sad. so lost as you were my own friend, lost sadly.

Do I give up on the friendship we kept on so long?

Or resign myself to ever-lasting distances and laws.

Yes, without me now you are stronger and I can change for you

But I wonder if that will even do.

You aren't dead to me and live on in my memory.

I'm jealous that you are happier without me, my missing piece.

You can't see it in me, without me, but I'm slowly fading away...

Sincerely,

In Agony

Reviews

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It's so sad when love goes away leaving you to wonder why. I think it's because it's so personal like we must not have been good enough, making us feel small...unimportant...taken for granted. It's a self-inflicted wound, you know, not letting that person go. You wrote this very well, with strong emotion. You have to be dead not to feel it.

[GalaxyGhost]

You are so right! Thanks!

[GalaxyGhost]

You are so right! Thanks!

[Ted Kniffen]

Very well written, GG. The feeling of loss comes through with great emotion.

[GalaxyGhost]

Thank you so much!

[Joseph Mulpeter]

This is a very moving piece, i read this whilst listening to You and Me - Lifehouse, and it made it even more powerful! i really love the use of the fading text, it works perfectly. well done :)

[GalaxyGhost]

Thank you so much!

[Kathrin S]

The emotion was well portrayed in this piece. I could imagine what the narrator was going through, and I liked the way it was in letter form.

Here are two thoughts I had:
- First line: in my opinion it should be "you have done", not "you had done" because afterwards you speak in the present tense.
- A full stop at "but you(. Y)ou depart." might make that line stronger and more powerful.

I really liked the length of the poem and the powerful way the narrator's emotions shone through.

[GalaxyGhost]

Thank you!

[Inject Positivity]

Melancholic and a very emotional... Each line hits hard with a strong pain that the poet is bearing with her... People hardly realize how much pain they cause to the one they leave behind... The "fading away" was excellent... Well done mate...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[GalaxyGhost]

Thank you! I love youreading thoughts on this! It means a lot.

[Gee]

Friendships do change over times, sometimes not for the better, as is the case here for you. Reading this, they have moved on to pastures New, closing the gate and leaving you looking in obviously. A fine piece of writing

[GalaxyGhost]

Thank you so much!

[DRAGO]

I don't know why, but it reminds me of the scientific aspect of a black hole

[GalaxyGhost]

I'm not sure how to interpret it, but I'll take it. Thanks! XD

[Paul Bell]

A lot of pain in this poem. I like how you pretend to be happy for your friend, but really dying inside. Friendship is a strong bond. Distance really shouldn't make any difference. Maybe this is the test to see if the friendship was that strong. Great write.

[GalaxyGhost]

Thanks! That's quite a good point about pretending to be happy for a friend as it is another way to see it. :)

[AliciaB]

Beautiful! I love the "Dear Wayward One" and "Sincerely, In Agony." Also, the fading part is great - I see what you did there! Very heartfelt. My favorite lines are "You became the puzzle and the piece that broke away / And me, left behind with the rest and still here to stay." Great work!

[GalaxyGhost]

Thank you so much! I didn't mention it the nanny description or anything but basically the background is about a friend. Hey Laura just probably losing a friend either through death or just moving to a different place.

[Diamond]

Ohh my! The loss of a loved one, accepted with utmost maturity but the Love that grieves. It sure aches.
Nice song letter.

[GalaxyGhost]

Thank you for reading! I appreciate your review!