You can't win!

You can't win!

A Poem by Douglas Levi Gribbins
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Dealing with fame wielding an iron fist. These are lyrics.

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You could punch me in my face and then attack me on the sight
You could prove that you're correct but you can't prove that you were right
You could rip my f*****g heart out and expect me not to fight
But i'm awake, it's time for some redemption going on tonight.

You can't win
You can't win

You could tell me that i'm yours and then claim me like your prize
You could buy all of my freedom, didn't matter what the price
But you get worried, you get angry, when I'm coming to your size?
I'm for revenge, It's about time for you to be meeting your demise!

You can't win
You can't win!
Take a hint
Take a hint

You would tell me that you loved as you took away my spine
I pulled the f*****g trigger when i let you run my life.
It's time for freedom, I'm my own army, best be preparing for a fight
Stand your guard, it'll be hard, to get you back into my mind.

I'll make a sin
So take a hint
You can't win!

© 2016 Douglas Levi Gribbins


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Preach. I hope we never meet. I hate public proposals. They're tacky.

Posted 6 Years Ago


❤ You are an amazing writer

Posted 8 Years Ago


Not my kind of reading material or language. Valentine

Posted 8 Years Ago


Strong flow of thoughts led to good ending my friend.
"I'll make a sin
So take a hint
You can't win!"
I like the above lines. Honest and direct. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


This poem practically fumes in a rageful rant. Some key, well-turned phrases that explain the rage: "rip my f*****g heart out and expect me not to fight" . . . "tell me that i'm yours and then claim me like your prize" . . . "tell me that you loved as you took away my spine". My favorite turn of phrase here: "You could prove that you're correct but you can't prove that you were right" -- making the reader stop to think about the subtle differences of being correct, but not right. I'm not sure if the narrator is saying he himself can't win, or the other person can't win? Either way actually works. Maybe you mean to leave this a little open-ended, so others can overlay their own rageful feelings. Good job.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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