Light from My Darkness

Not really structured but very raw emotion.

When I sit and think of you as one night

It gets bleaker and darker as time goes on

On a 3rd June night,I cant find any light

To hold the tears from falling is a fight

 

Winter nights are not only cold but dark

Something about this night makes it harker

Maybe its a reaction to a remark

From a place usually brighter

 

This night seems to be one of doom and gloom

But you would never let me cry like this

So these tears will be the fuel for my lamp

The source of my light as I reminisce

 

As long as I continue to do good

We'll meet again,but if I could I would.

 

I am hot and cold,in one sense a flaccid cell as I lack vigor and firmness but also turgid as my heart is a bubble of emotion about to burst,talk about being bittersweeet.

 

Gazza

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"I am hot and cold,in one sense a flaccid cell as I lack vigor and firmness but also turgid as my heart is a bubble of emotion about to burst,talk about being bittersweeet."
Life allowed to be many things. In the end we will wish we were kind and had more hello's than goodbyes. Thank you for the excellent poem. Made me think this early morning.
Coyote



Gazza

[Pencrafter]

Your poem is indeed emotional and expressive. I would suggest changing the last line structure so that it fits a little better with the previous verses. Interesting poem.

[Aehr]

its awesome, really. well done.

[Gazza]

thanks you very much hope you read more

[Harley (arbiter)]

Great job! True, very raw emotion. I can relate and that makes it even better

[Gazza]

Thank you

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

This poem is so amazing!
Thanks a lot for sharing!
100/100

[Gazza]

Thank you for reading it

[xxxrawr_friendxxx]

First poem I've read from you. Awesome... Very powerful... I like youuuuu :3

[Gazza]

Thanks, feel free to have a look at the others.

[deepblue04]

This is amazing! I like your poems, you should do more. Good job!

[Gazza]

thanks, definitely will.

[Dark Tower]

A thought provoking piece, the imagery is well expressed and makes visualising the scene easy and rather fun. Well written

Just one note, I don't think harker is correct word for the second line in stanza two.