Time for Change

Just a page out of my mind...any ideas to improve it...

Time for Change

 

I’m done being the nice guy that puts others firs all the time

That sees problems of my brothers and sisters as mine

I’m done reaching for you and wasting my time

Cooking food for people with whom I don’t dine

Seems being kind to you was a crime

You don’t even see that you’ve crossed my line

My weakness was tolerating you but now I’m in my prime

 

Maybe I became too kind

My humility was the weakness you could not find.

Like a lion my pride will be hard to hide

Until I find a delectable woman to be my bride

 

I would rather have one who will stay true

Than many who will look cool

I would rather have one who will fight for me

Than many who will flee

 

I’m done chasing you around

I’m done trying to keep the bond we had

I wish you’d keep your feet on the ground

But seeing u float like a butterfly makes me sad

Because just on the horizon

I can see the storm

 

I wish one of you would hear my noble call out

But you all seem deaf even when I shout

I promised to be there for you

Every word I said to you was true

 

The only difference is this time I will watch u pounded till fine

Maybe then you will learn through the pain

Author's Note

any Ideas to improve it are welcome...

Reviews

[AvalonJune]

this is rlly well done. i especially like the 3rd stanza. this is rlly good...

[Gazza]

Thank you very much.

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

This is beautiful! I loved the rhythm and the flow if thoughts.
Great job!
100/100

[Gazza]

Glad you liked it, thank you for reading.

[Coyote Poetry]

"I would rather have one who will stay true
Than many who will look cool
I would rather have one who will fight for me"
You are very wise. A woman is beautiful to the eyes of the beholder. Real love is 50 years together and a lot of good and bad times survived. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Gazza]

Thank you for the time and wonderful encouragement

[Androglossia]

Being taken for granted or even taking someone for granted is an act committed and experienced by all individuals at some point in their lives. What's more, the role will reverse and we will do the same. It's human nature but not kind at all.

This is a very realistic write.

[Gazza]

Thank you for the wise words.

[deepblue04]

theres little typos here and there but its really cool. Good job!

[Gazza]

Thank you for the time

[Junert]

Guess using short hands in chatting is becoming a part of your mind and hands. You used 'u' twice in it. I like the theme...being nice is not such a nice thing anymore.

[Gazza]

Thank you, will need to get out of the habit

[SmileBig :)]

this is good, but i feel it doesnt flow as well as it could. my advice for this one; stop trying to rhyme and just write whatever you feel.

[Gazza]

Thank you, will look into that

[SmileBig :)]

no problem