Ever The Twain

This madness

is a site better not to have been

a bonfire of devils that linger unseen - and

don't mess with Mr. In-between

 

It's the story of a lovely lady

who was bringing up three very lovely girls

the eldest was a beaut’; the youngest, blonde and cute - but

the middle one, all ill-repute and curls.

 

She's madness

with twitching leg, and blue

unstill, at unrest, like someone I knew - these

foolish things remind me of you.

 

It's the story of a man named Brady

who was bringing up three young boys of his own

the youngest, the beginner; the eldest, a winner - but

the middle one, all sinner, left alone.

 

He's madness

reaching out but throwing blows

in defence of all he sows - heaven knows

anything goes.

 

And woe-betide they ever should meet

She and He, like dogs on heat - inevitably

to burn each other out, never left in doubt

their only moves

                       - to Twist and Shout.

Reviews

[Sasha]

Entertaining. I loved the first stanza in particular. "Mr. In-Between" made me think of someone... though I'm not entirely sure who the hell you were talking about. I laughed at the middle sun being called "all sinner". Thankfully, most of us are just part sinner. I also loved This/He's/She's madness and the way your pattern was consistent through the entire poem. The sex and rhyme were added bonuses and the nod to the then-popular dance style (not that I'd know) was clever. 99/100

[Griffin Hill]

Very nice, indeed. What a fun read.

[ashley]

Oh, I just love this. Really, I do. The rhyming added an extra touch, so good. My favorite was the last stanza. Fantastic job! :D

[ettorney]

Your just mad. Stark raving mad.

nice write.

[J.M. Barrett]

I always knew there was a darker side to the Brady Bunch. ;]

I am in love with the way you use movies, songs, books, t.v. shows, etc. to inspire your work. The way you do it is very captivating. You create something new from something familiar. That takes talent, and you definitely have that!

[Ryan Falzon - Tymon]

I recognized the descriptions, but I'm not really familiar with the Brady bunch a lot. I love the rhyming and I especially loved the last stanza!