Locked-Door Song

Locked-Door Song

A Poem by Zack Burton
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Back to rhyming. A poem left to your interpretation. As always.

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The chorus keeps repeating

Droning out my infamy
This radio of hate
You're beautiful so instantly
Another breath of hate
And why you fit so perfectly
Is an excuse I hate
Don't tell me you'll be there for me
When all that's left is hate

If you asked me, I'd just shrug
I don't have time to salt this slug
Because I don't know
This rodeo

The chorus keeps repeating

My father-mother love for you
is sucking dry my love for you
And now I feel my love for you
is something out of place

This part is the music break
Hooked in here to sing
And though I'm lost in every ache
I still can feel the sting
God knows why I'm doing this
It slurps up all my pain
The blood caress my only kiss
You dry my every stain

The chorus keeps repeating

You think I am a friend or foe?
I just don't know this rodeo
You block me off with tell and show
I just don't know this rodeo
You've got me falling, sinking low

The chorus keeps repeating

© 2011 Zack Burton


Author's Note

Zack Burton
Thanks for the reviews. If you'd comment on the style, I'd appreciate it.

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Lock-Door Song is an amazing title :) the poem is lovely too

Posted 9 Years Ago


Instead of saying chorus keeps repeating you can just right chorus. Unless of course that was done on purpose (?) I also found it funny that in the first stanza/verse you write "radio of hate" and then you repeat the words hate throughout the stanza/verse. It's like hate is in constant rotation.That was really creative

Posted 9 Years Ago


Beautifully written, I truelly appreciate the style that you chose. The first verse is very powerful I feel, it seemed to speak to me more then the others, just because its talking about beauty and hate, like society says that we should hate nthose that are more beautiful than ourselves in many different ways. Anyways thats just what i got from this. Thank you for writing. Blessed Be.

Posted 9 Years Ago


yeah man
i like the tone and the musical singsong quality of this one

If you asked me, I'd just shrug
I don't have time to salt this slug
Because I don't know
This rodeo

yeah i like that one
nice piece

Posted 9 Years Ago


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The emotions and words are portrayed evenly; and your imagery is amazing. I really liked the line:
"The blood caress my only kiss
You dry my every stain"
Great write, and well done :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


A delicate wording that uses imagery to impact the reader, well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is amazing i really enjoyed these lyrics, love the style as well.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I enjoyed this a lot. simply beautiful!

Posted 9 Years Ago


this is stunning piece of art! beautiful work!

Posted 9 Years Ago


I really like this line:

And though I'm lost in every ache
I still can feel the sting

I can relate to the subject and I really like the speed of the verse. Nice work.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Added on April 23, 2011
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