A Poem by Veronica Ostling-Hirschberg

She had climbed vast chasms without him before
that now she saw as impossible when he's gone

weeping for every moment lost she
fears when the time comes and he
vanishes before her eyes
they both know time runs short and
that it could end at anywhere but
they keep up the hope that maybe

they'll be some of the lucky two who
make it to old age who have shared
a lifetime with each other

But she knows that the world isn't a nice place
he could be snatched from her in the night
or on his way back with a dozen roses for her to find
only after the call has been made
Laying in a stilled fright she thinks endlessly
"What will I do if he's gone?" 

I cannot imagine I could do a thing. 

© 2013 Veronica Ostling-Hirschberg

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I love your word choice! It flows very smoothly and each line stands out. If I could suggest something, if this poem is personal, use specific examples. It could make for a stronger poem.

Overall, BEAUTIFUL :)

Posted 6 Years Ago

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Veronica Ostling-Hirschberg

6 Years Ago

Thank you! Actually giving me advice! ;D I'll consider revision, tweaking this May be incentive to s.. read more

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Veronica Ostling-Hirschberg
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