I Am...

I Am...

A Poem by Miiki

I Am...

I am hardworking and sentimental


I wonder what will happen after death


I hear the laughter of my loved ones


I see the good and bad memories 


I want to always be with family


I am hardworking and sentimental



I pretend to be older than I am


I feel nervous about my grades


I touch the moon and stars when I work 


I worry about failing 


I cry when I've upset someone 


I am hardworking and sentimental



I understand that everybody will make mistakes


I say to always try your hardest


I dream about what could happen in the future


I try to be the best


I hope to always be with friends and family


I am hardworking and sentimental

© 2012 Miiki


Author's Note

Miiki
In school, I have to write an I Am poem and I'm not sure if it's good. Please tell me what you think! A bunch of people are going to be reading it so i don't want it to seem stupid or weird. So please tell me what you think!!

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I love the repetition. You show self-confidence that you are that you are hard working and sentimental, yet you question all of these outside factors, which creates a nice tension within the piece. Very sweet, and all very relatable. If you are interested, and only IF, you may want to experiment with breaking it up and make each "I am hard working and sentimental" a new stanza. It's just an idea. No harm meant.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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SJ
A very very strong poem, love the writing, and the conviction with which you convey your doubts, fears, dreams and strengths and beliefs! Keep up the exceptional work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Miiki

7 Years Ago

Thank you! I'm glad you think that my work is exceptional :)
It's nice 94/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


Miiki

7 Years Ago

Thank you!
SlightlyOdd

7 Years Ago

Your welcome it was a pleasure to read
It's a nice poem and with a little here and there it could be a song XD

I like the repetition, it really emphasizes your point and the way you present your everyday thoughts.

A coincidence as my class is doing an I Am poem too XD but don't worry about sounding stupid because the thought counts :) But good luck to you though because a lot of times teachers wouldn't appreciate creative poems, they like those mechanically written with words and lines they can't understand but overall doesn't make sense at all.

A poet isn't measured by the words they used but rather in the manner on which they use words on so this is good because 1. It's straight to the point 2. Easy to understand 3. It flows nicely

Keep Writing and Good Luck to you :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Katherine Enma Pineapple

7 Years Ago

yeah everything turned out better than we expected XD then your friends would be like "damn lucky b*.. read more
Miiki

7 Years Ago

haha yeah :)
Katherine Enma Pineapple

7 Years Ago

XD
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Great write! Really saw the flow and rhytm! Loved it! 100/100 :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


Miiki

7 Years Ago

Thanks!
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7 Years Ago

You're welcome! :)
I like this. It's certainly not weird. Very blunt, unlike most poetry. Nice. Actually, I might do a poem like this if you don't mnd. An I Am poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


R.O.M.E.T.S.I.

7 Years Ago

yeah, school assignments can be really liberating.I got counted down so often for "Not adressing th.. read more
Miiki

7 Years Ago

I hate it when they do that. But thanks for the help!
R.O.M.E.T.S.I.

7 Years Ago

welcome

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