Unheard

Hmm. A really quick poem. I feel frustrated sometimes that I'm not very loud. It's not that I'm not confident, I just hate shouting. Sometimes I feel a bit ignored. It's unfinished at present.

My voice is a crack in the wall

I am not seen at all

I am a ghost that wanders invisible

And peers through the gates of a graveyard

My shout is as a leaf flutters on the wind

Fleeting and brief

As is my anger that hits a brick wall

It bounces back and becomes nothing at all

Author's Note

Please ignore the title, I have no idea what to call it.

Reviews

[Horizons]

Ok, as you're not sure about title so, acc. to me, i think the title should be " In the wall"... and if you like this title then you can paste it but if you use this title then don't forget to add your this line "My voice's crack in the wall" at last (in an end/as an ending) then this title'd be great and well suited with your poem :) Hope you didn't mind my words...

By the way, i enjoyed this Another poem too, i love your concept as you mentioned, you're not finished with that write so, you can make it's IInd version too and use title acc. to that :) I love your imaginary as well. Well done once again.

[Gilda]

Thanks very much :) I like that idea for a title. Hopefully I'll think of the rest of it soon lol!

[Woody]

the frustration of not being heard or heeded is nicely expressed here.
I enjoyed the read.

[emmajoy]

Feeling as if unseen and unheard has it's good side you know.. tis like a magic cloak that takes you places you might not otherwise reach. It's only when someone feels a nothing that the hurt digs deeper. Your sensitivity shows in your words, not your lack of courage. You're a fine, fine writer, your words are special and so worth sharing. Thank you for just that.

Title: Unheard - for now. Why not! :)

[Rose of many colours]

Hey GB very good. That is a classic. The title ain't bad...

[Antoñyo]

Unheard, Myself Unheard, When I'm Unheard is fine... but the writing here is not as subtle a silence; very much loud and clear...and heard by this reader

Thanks for sharing

[annabellee]

I can relate to that, you portrayed that feeling of being ignored very well.
"I am a ghost that wanders invisible
And peers through the gates of a graveyard"
loved these lines, great imagery just like throughout the whole poem.
Good write :)

[Gilda]

Thank you very much for reading, I'm glad you liked it :)

[annabellee]

you are most welcome :)

[00000000000000000000000..]

( A Spirit Beyond The Wind ) Would sound awesome. I love it makes a person think deep upon the actual living moments we have that don't seem liveable, Almost like everything a person would do comes rite back on them. That's what I feel within. And I sure every poem that's wrote is taken different, So I hope I wasn't outside the box lol. Beautiful work Georgie B

[Gilda]

Thank you very much! Interesting idea for a title. I would like to write more about those weird moments in life that aren't either happy or sad but just pass by, I think they're interesting :)

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Your very welcome, I find those moments to be awesome myself:)

[S C]

My voice is a crack in the wall

I am not seen at all


The first line really did something for me. Well penned.

xo

[Gilda]

Thank you :)