Remainders

close your eyes     as the sealing of shutters

when night falls in slick sonnets about this place

 

cast aside your supplication     save it for another day

instead build with me a doorway that we may both enter:

there will be time for regret, when winter calls an end

            to this harvest

 

but it is summer still     our bodies know better

than our sanity, when seasons are winding away

 

breath is enough now     between us and around

our flesh like the bending of summer wheat

golden beneath a sun meant only for one thing:

            violent fluorescence

 

we are the remainders of a daydream     an equation

unrounded and infinite as the bridge of the sky

bowing above the bed that we have stolen     the life

            we have chosen to live

 

hush now, love, tomorrow is only a possibility

dawn may never break over this roof     tonight

            is all that we have

Reviews

[Leigh]

The remainders of a daydream and the remains of a day, in the dark our judgements alter and in it I hear the cold and calculating voice of a seductress, enticing someone to live for the moment, this is so erotically beautiful. I agree with TL there is a subtle unspoken theme in this, great choice of words

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you so much, my friend!

[Leigh]

Very welcome

[TL Boehm]

WOW. There is such an undercurrent of sensuality in this poem - an intimacy to it. I feel a bit voyeuristic reading it. As though I accidentally opened someone's journal - to a private page. Its not overt - just deep, resonant - earthy words. Something shared between two who know each other well and have for a long time.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I'm glad you enjoyed this one, TL. :)

[Sasha]

"hush now, love, tomorrow is only a possibility
dawn may never break over this roof tonight
is all that we have"

Beautiful !

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you so much, Sasha :)

[Sasha]

your welcome:)

[ChemicalMadness]

we are the remainders of a daydream....whispers and light and fleeting ideas, all faint as a smile we never knew we had but saw in each other and thought, god, i love that smile....bowing above the bed that we have stolen......I love that stanza. the whole piece. you know i'm a sucker for windows, doors, and dreams.......

CM.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Glad you enjoyed this one, CM.

[Ed Hart]

'gather ye rosebuds while ye may'...this also puts me in mind of 'Dover Beach'...and many an ardent lover's long beseech...your song rings and rings across the places of the heart, and clouds of parting on the distant horizon, perhaps...ah, perhaps, but yet there's still this night, and what did any lover ever have but that...ah wisdom, ah lauralie...i never found a rope strong to keep me to the mast, ah me

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Why are your reviews always more interesting than my poetry...I am humble to thee, my friend. Thank you.

[Tks]

I wanted to put this off to reading tomorrow.
But I realized that "tonight is all we have".
Beautiful piece, but perhaps a rhyming pattern would make this gorgeous piece heavenly to read. Great work, looking forward to your new pieces before "night falls in slick sonnets"

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Haha...rhyming pattern...I'm afraid that would be a disaster; I know my own limits and I am limited when it comes to creating something with a rhyme scheme. I did it in college, when it was required, and then quickly let it go :) Thank you for the suggestion, though :)

[kublakhan27]

You do a masterful job of making the reader feel different with every poem...this sounds like an invitation to live in the moment, for there will never be another like it...there may be moments that feel the same, but really every moment is unique...you may have noticed that I rarely cite specific parts of your poems in my reviews and that's because I can never decide which parts to cite...it's like trying to decide what instrument I like the best...sterling work as always my friend.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I'm glad that you felt this one...and it is obvious that you (as always) have grasped my concept and tone with a sense that only you possess. I love your reviews...thank you!

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure Sarah :)

[MsJewel]

There are so many wonderful lines in your poem worth remembering and repeating..it is impossible to pick a favorite. The imagery in your poetry is always stunning and this is no exception. I enjoyed reading this very much! :) Julie

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you so much, Julie, once again!