The Goodbye Look

The Goodbye Look

A Poem by Gomer LePoet
"

the look that says it all

"
  

The Goodbye Look


The Dan talked about it, they even wrote a song,

how things got so messed up, she finally said so long,

you just had to test the waters, had to push the edge,

now your standing all alone, out there on that ledge


you promised her a wine and dine, then forgot to call,

you said that you were detained, down at City Hall,

some mix up, some sort of gaffe, you were not to blame,

why did you not dial me up, if this is what you claim


she checked it out, she caught you flat, your pathetic lies,

disgust and disappointment, laser beams from her blue eyes,

there is no way to misread, those daggers that you took,

I believe you just got, what's known as, The Goodbye Look


You said you did not know that girl, just helped her find her way,

but you were seen at her locker, seven times today,

it wasn't you is what you said, must be some mistake,

you weren't even there today, you were at the lake


she checked it out, she caught you flat, your pathetic lies,

disgust and disappointment, lasers from her blue eyes,

there is no way to misread, those daggers that you took,

I know you just got, what's known as, The Goodbye Look


Gomer LePoet...

© 2012 Gomer LePoet


Author's Note

Gomer LePoet
The Dan says it best :


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Beware of the daggers. You know you did it then. Nice work!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Superb piece with catchy lines and rhymes, plus a great song from Mr. Fagan to top if off my friend.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Great lyrics. Ya know know, you mess up and...well what can you expect. Just be glad those daggers aren't real.
Is that a Les Paul you're holding there?

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Posted 9 Years Ago


HA .. FUN .. AND SO MANY HAVE RECEIVED THOSE LOOKS !! .. AND SO MANY DESERVED JUST WHAT THEY GOT !!

FUN .. COOL .. JAZZ

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Posted 9 Years Ago


I had a few goodbye looks and a lot more. The look I feared the most is the look. I'm going kill you ASAP. Nice story and I like the way you ended the excellent poem.
Coyote

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Posted 9 Years Ago


I enjoyed this.
Witty.

My favorite stanza:
you promised her a wine and dine, then forgot to call,
you said that you were detained, down at City Hall,
some mix up, some sort of gaffe, you were not to blame,
why did you not dial me up, if this is what you claim

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Posted 11 Years Ago


This flys off the tongue in a really smart, witty, semi-'street' fashion that lends it an overall 'kudos'... Almost 'beatnick' in style. It's very amusing and rhymes real well without falling into the trap of using the easiest word that comes along. Also, although accessible its reading age group may be to many, it is never completely simple in its delivery. It desribes a situation many will recognise immediately, whether male or female. That 'look' is universal... Great fun and a great hook line/title.

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Posted 11 Years Ago


sounds like a song. why not to sing it... niecely done.

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Posted 11 Years Ago


hah. this was fantastic! i love how witty and scornful it is! MY FAVORITE from u so far. keep writing!

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Posted 11 Years Ago


I agree, this poem is a song! My eyes are gray, not blue, but I feel I am expert at the "good-bye look." You, even, hit on all of those basic cover-up lies. I loved this poem!!

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Posted 11 Years Ago



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Gomer LePoet

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I am a former IT Manager/Consultant working for many Fortune 500 companies, mainly in the Banking, Telecommunications industry. I am also a part time musician, playing guitars and keyboards and writ.. more..

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