2nd Helping

another course of tasty love

 

2^nd Helping

well now I've gone and gorged myself

I've devoured every morsel I could find,

but still I have this empty feeling

have I gone completely out of mind

it seems I just can't get enough

I'm needing more and more each day,

taking in all of your natural gifts

constant searching for another way

you reach out to touch my soul

the fragrance of your sweetness I inhale,

a new boquet of lovely wild flowers

intoxicating like an english ale

so I cannot leave this still empty heart

I must return to the red velvet rope,

back once more for a 2^nd helping

where you will fill me again I hope

I think that I might be in a vicious circle

cause I admit I do not want this to ever end,

not only are you this special lover

even more you are this special friend

so when I said before that I was hungry

it is for you that my hunger stays,

I want to bring you never ending pleasure

so many many times so many many ways

Gomer LePoet...

Reviews

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and back for a 2nd helping, very nice
my favorite lines are

not only are you this special lover
even more you are this special friend

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

A beautiful poem, David. Love is a mystery..

I think that I might be in a vicious circle

cause I admit I do not want this to ever end,

not only are you this special lover

even more you are this special friend

I like this verse... vicious circle... this happens to us .. very nice .

Chloe

[Albatross]

There is something so sweet and satisfying about love, we are constantly trying to find it, to captivate and express it in our words. You definitely carried a part of that expression through with this piece. Beautiful, I love it:)

[Desert Dreamer]

I know this insatiable hunger, the feeling of emptiness that cannot be satisfied...very expressive poem.

[KatiePie]

"I've devoured every morsel I could find,
but still I have this empty feeling"
These two were some of my favorite lines, because they represent something people don't learn unless they've expreienced it, that never ending hunger that refuses to be filled. In this case using that as a metaphor for your longinf for this woman is brilliant. Beautiful.

"Not only are you this special lover
even more you are this special friend"
These lines really touched me, they made me believe that this isn't just some girl your chasing after with a bag of lust, which so often is the case. It says that she means something to you, which makes this all the more beautiful.

Over all I really loved this poem, it was a delight to read and it made me smile.
-Cathrine :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Yes, that hunger will get you every time, excellent work

[Ruth]

Vicious circle indeed love!
Awesome poem, insatiable hunger for anything is at times unbearable! lol
xx