What you do....

What you do....

A Poem by Bexfinch
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This kid that always does stuff better than me in language class I mean there's one in every class Sarah , Candace , Mackenzie , Gabe and so on

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I draw
You paint
I Flap
You soar
I sing
You make a CD
I write
You win the  class competition
I act
And your a movie star
Everything I do seems so trivial
from your point of view
Maybe life is a big competition between me and you
But just for your interest the next thing I'm going to do will blow your mind

© 2010 Bexfinch


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Wow I really really liked this one. Of all the poems I read from you this is my favorite. The way you make great accomplishments yet whoever your up against (a friend?) does it even better was so sad and i love the word trivial you used. The ending didn't really do the poem just, but it was still very good. Great write!
-Courage

Posted 11 Years Ago


great message, but needs work on a technical level. great job though

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Bexfinch
Bexfinch

Jacksonville, FL



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