Alone on Christmas.

Alone on Christmas.

A Poem by Mimi

I walk down an empty street.
I have no shoes upon my feet,
My clothes are old and ragged,
My hair is snarled and matted,
I have nowhere to stay
On this dark and oh so lonely day.
I don't like this one bit,
But maybe I deserved it.
I walk back home with too many thoughts
Here is my house, a cardboard box.
It rains, so I find a store a block away.

I passed a kid on her bike on the way
I pull on doors, and in place they stay.
A find a sign that reads "Closed for the holiday"
I sit alone by the front door.
My house in ruins as rain begins to pour.
I curl up tightly in a ball on the ground
I fall asleep to a peaceful sound
It's rain's soft patter from the grey sky
And it wets the where I lay. Broken, I cry.

© 2010 Mimi

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Author's Note

My Mama is going to kick me out this March and I started to freak out about it, so I wrote this to keep from losing it...

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This is good. There are some places where an extra word or twwo disrupted the flow, but its nothing major. Good write.

Posted 13 Years Ago

Wow...your poetry gets better with each one you write but your stories keep getting sadder! I still say you have soo much talent in you for the few years youve been on this earth. This is a wonderful poem with great visuals, you are getting better at showing instead of telling which we all struggle with ;) oxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo

Posted 13 Years Ago

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This is so sad.It's so well written and expressed

Posted 13 Years Ago

An intense story of a sad life. Well written and thought out. There was just one little thing that detracted a tiny bit from it as I read:
"A find a sign..." I think you meant "I find a sign..."

Other than that your poem is great and very thought provoking.

Posted 13 Years Ago

Very nice way to let out your feelings. Good rhyming scheme too. I like how you base it around a holiday, the time of year everyone needs someone to be with. Sad story behind it all, I hope it works out for you.

Posted 13 Years Ago

Although you changed it slightly, I couldn't critique it any different. It is still good, and with the few changes made, I'd say you improved it just a bit :) Good job once again

Posted 13 Years Ago

Dear Mimi,

This is an extremely powerful poem. You have painted so clearly the dark, hopelessness of someone alone and homeless during the holiday season. This person's life is so bleak. Rain mimics the soul, here, lost and broken. It mimics the tears shed over an unhappy and empty life. Through your words we feel the agony and suffering of this poor unfortunate.

A very nice write.

Best regards,


Posted 13 Years Ago

I could really imagine this scene playing through my head. It was sad, and the description you gave was good 'old and ratted' 'snarled and matted'. I liked that. And your rhyming scheme was good. Great poem over all with alot of meaning, I felt, behind it.

Posted 13 Years Ago

Wow...So many things going on in your mind for such a young person.
This was a very emotional poem. I'm pretty sure I know what you're going through because that has happened a few times with my cousins.
I wish you the best.

Posted 13 Years Ago

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Added on January 6, 2010
Last Updated on January 7, 2010



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