The Flame

The Flame

A Poem by Nicholas Duboe
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This is a poem I wrote (TBH) about my father. Hope you like it!

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You were once a flame I kept near for warmth but I learned to embrace the cold
Your light could no longer keep my attention and your intensity was getting old

I wandered away from your comfort blindly navigating the dark unknown
Then came to find I didn't need your light cause I'd sparked a flame of my own

But I remember the flame that kept me warm even though I've gone astray
Burning my own path through life growing further and further each day

In the end that flame is out there though not bright enough to see
No matter the distances I may cross, I know which flame ignited me.

© 2019 Nicholas Duboe


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Nicholas Duboe
Hope you like it! Your comments are well appreciated!

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I do like this, it seems to me what you're saying here is that you are grateful for many of the things instilled in you or given to you by your father but also that he was at times a foreboding influence or figure, one you had to move away from and go your own way ("burn your own path" - I really liked this image) but overall you are grateful to him.

I may be totally wrong (I often am) and obviously I don't know you or your father much less your relationship, I just hope not offended/upset if I am wrong because I really liked it. I thought the repetition of 'flame' and associated words like 'burning' and 'ignited' really drove it on and made it me visualise those images in motion. Thanks

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nicholas Duboe

2 Years Ago

You nailed it! Yeah there have been some difficulties and we currently arent on speaking terms howev.. read more
Tourist the Sleepwalker

2 Years Ago

I've had a complicated reationship with my dad too, take care I'l' read more of your stuff soon
Nicholas Duboe

2 Years Ago

Much appreciated, have a lovely night.



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Your lines have a great natural rhythm and I'm a sucker for rhyme. First one of your poems I have read and I like very much what i see. I also enjoyed the subject matter and the message you got across. Your Dad did well and so have you.

Chtis

Posted 1 Year Ago


Nicely rhymed. A poem of maturity, after some perspective has been gained. Sometimes we can see our parents better after they're gone.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Nicholas Duboe

2 Years Ago

Appreciate the comment! Thanks for reading!
I do like this, it seems to me what you're saying here is that you are grateful for many of the things instilled in you or given to you by your father but also that he was at times a foreboding influence or figure, one you had to move away from and go your own way ("burn your own path" - I really liked this image) but overall you are grateful to him.

I may be totally wrong (I often am) and obviously I don't know you or your father much less your relationship, I just hope not offended/upset if I am wrong because I really liked it. I thought the repetition of 'flame' and associated words like 'burning' and 'ignited' really drove it on and made it me visualise those images in motion. Thanks

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nicholas Duboe

2 Years Ago

You nailed it! Yeah there have been some difficulties and we currently arent on speaking terms howev.. read more
Tourist the Sleepwalker

2 Years Ago

I've had a complicated reationship with my dad too, take care I'l' read more of your stuff soon
Nicholas Duboe

2 Years Ago

Much appreciated, have a lovely night.

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Added on February 15, 2019
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Nicholas Duboe
Nicholas Duboe

Denton, TX



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Hello there, my name is Nicholas and I am currently 24 years old. I am a husband, a father and a son. I am also a poet and attempting novelist. I began writing years ago using Booksie, posting many po.. more..

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