Time Gone

Time Gone

A Poem by Gracie.M
"

These are some song lyrics.

"

Hold onto my hand a while,

I feel more calm

When you're around

I'm sound asleep.

Where has the day gone?

Where has the day gone.

 

Ooooooohhhh~

Ooooooooooohhhhh~

 

Wake up in the afternoon,

My make-ups smudged

But that's okay

You say to me.

Where have the weeks gone?
Where have the weeks gone.

 

Oooooohhhhhh~

Ooooooohhhhh~

 

Keep on smiling my dear,

I know it's hard

But we're alright

I'll fight with you.

Where have the years gone?

Where have the years gone.

 

Oooooooooooohh~

Ooooooohhhhh~

 

Hold onto my hand a while,

I feel more calm

When you're around

I'm sound asleep.

Where have the years gone?

Where have the years gone.

 

Ooooooohhhh

Ooooooooooohhhhh

 

Oooohhhhhhh~~~~

© 2014 Gracie.M


Author's Note

Gracie.M
The first song lyrics that I've written. Some feedback would be good. :)

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You kept it basic and it has a simplicity to the words...
I would take at this a few more times...
and experiment with the word arrangement ...
and get it a polish...but as is --- it stands ground...
but if wanted to make this better...
I believe there is room for improvement...nonetheless...

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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You kept it basic and it has a simplicity to the words...
I would take at this a few more times...
and experiment with the word arrangement ...
and get it a polish...but as is --- it stands ground...
but if wanted to make this better...
I believe there is room for improvement...nonetheless...

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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