DWI

A life cut short...for the want of "one more for the road!" This is a true story, that appeared in my local paper "The Record" of Bergen County, NJ. The driver killed both the child and limo driver, and injured her Grandmother on their way home from her

 

DWI

She was a vision in pink
Yellow curls spilling down her neck
Her tiny hands clutching flowers
When they found her in the wreck!
She had walked down the aisle
An adorable flower girl,
Tossing rose petals
Smiling her last smile
But how were we to know?
A tiny life cut short
In the middle of the night
Her grieving parents knowing
Their world would never be right!

“Have a drink with me my friend
Why not two or three?
I’m all alone tonight
 I want some company
What’s that you say
I’m too drunk to drive?”
Yes you were my friend
Now that child’s
No longer alive!
Was that drink so important
That you could take a life?
The fact that you survived
Haunts that man and wife

They will always remember
When they found her in that wreck
Her yellow curls covered in blood
Her head severed at the neck!
So have another drink my friend
As you step up to the bar
How many people will you kill
When you get into your car!

 

 

Copyright©2007Beatrice Boyle

(All rights reserved)

 

Author's Note

Critique invited.

Reviews

[Robert Francis Callaci]

A strong and heart breaking message- Very powerful -a poem like this gets you angry at those that willingly drive drunk. It shows a totally disregard for life-Foe me there's no difference between a stone cold killer and a drunk driver that takes a life due to his/her need for a buzz.

I agree with all the commenters on this piece as well as taraov's- the poetic flow was a little off but the message outweighed and took precedence over the poetic construction of the piece. The tone or mood the piece created was highly effective- it made me shed a tear for the child and want to put a bullet through the drunks head. Good poetry....


my warmest
bob

[DanaRegen]

Wow powerful and moving piece. I dont understand why people still have the nerves to drive drunk. Im just happy there are groups like SADD, MADD, DADD. Where I live there tend to be alot of drunk driving incidents, and I was almost killed in one when I first moved here. I was lucky the lady swerved into another lane. DWI hits so close to me that if all bars were closed id be ok with that, beacause at least another life would be spared. In any event this is a sad, true and moving piece. I appreciate you trying to educate those who have or will every think about driving drunk. Nicely Writen Beatrice!
-Dana S. :)

[Fran Marie]

It's so sad how many lives are cut short because of drunk drivers
the pain being much worse when it is just a child~ Well expressed
write with a great message therein~THanks for sharing~Fran

[Anita B Jacques]

Thank you Bea for your write, very real and to the point. A heart felt poem, thank you Bea for sharing,
God Bless you.

[Angel Baby]

A very sad, but powerful write you have written. I do hope more people read this, and take note of the very strong message it portrays. God Bless, P.W.

[Wildecat]

Grandma Bea, this is a wonderful write about a difficult subject that many people don't like to face. I admire you for writing this much needed piece.

[tarasov]

that very intense...but i have to say it lacks a bit of poetic flow. it has great spoken word potential but i did needs a bit of word play like switching words. instead of "they will always remember" maybe: "they will remember always" i enjoy that kind of thing but maybe thats just my kind of style...i did like it though! i hope this come off to harsh...it's really very good! :)